I looked at her through tears,
“I am so proud of you!” I tried to smile.
I wasn’t expecting this and neither had she,
Once again- in a game that for once I thought I may win,
I lost…
Failed…
Crashed.
“I’m so sorry!” she hugged me,
I hugged her back,
And as much as I couldn’t bare to look at her,
I couldn’t let go.
It’s hard to give something up to someone,
That wasn’t even yours to begin with
And it’s even harder to unwantingly give up a dream
…to someone who loves you more then anything.
But oh how I wanted it,
I did everything in my power-
But for maybe the hundredth time…
The glory was hers.
“I’m sorry you had to see me like this.” I said through swollen eyes,
“I didn’t want it to happen like this,
This was yours, I don’t deserve it.” She said as she cried on my shoulder.
“It’s yours; I want you to have it-I want you to shine.” I sobbed.
I couldn’t take the pain any longer and I let go of her,
As I let my emotions carry me away.
I allowed it to flow away from my soul,
And tried so utterly hard to not look back.
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Written September 16th, 2005
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"I said through swollen eyes," was my favorite line of the poem, and I loved the ending.
"I allowed it to flow away from my soul,
And tried so utterly hard to not look back."
Well captured and well put.
"…to someone who loves you more then anything." -- then should be than.
I liked this, again so much for those parts in particular. -
nice work!
this is beautiful. i really liked these lines especially, they really stuck out in my mind:
It’s hard to give something up to someone,
That wasn’t even yours to begin with
And it’s even harder to unwantingly give up a dream
…to someone who loves you more then anything.
and just so you know... instead of then, it should be than... just a little grammar thing... im such a stickler for grammar... =) but anyway, this tells a very sad story and i can really relate to it. your words were constructed beautifally and it was a very nice read. great job!
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