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Here Without My Heart

 



 

I am here without my heart
my intellect is much less painful
to journey with.

 

To see and not to feel…

 

So leave your heart at the door,
and enter.

 

We will weave words
that are not muddled by our wayward hearts
which are naughty, unruly, disobedient,
errant, and rebellious at best.

 

No mess, no disorder,
no jumbled, mixed-up, confusing,
bewildering entanglements.

 

Here, let us engage in verbal barbs of logic
and be satisfied.

 

Stop!
Do not reach across the perilous abyss between our two hearts.
Let us solve our problems mathematically
and call it a day.
We will return home in peace
and not in pieces.

 

To have our eyes meet without desire
in impassionate productive discourse-
this is what we must strive for here
while leaving our hearts at the door...

 

Let us speak, and not sing;
sketch, and not paint;
walk, and not run.
We will travel straight, and ignore the curves.

 

Sounds like lots of fun, doesn’t it?
No! Exactly!

 

So wear your business suit,
leave your bathing suit.
There are serious matters to tend to here.
No time for play.
No time for hurt.
No time for healing.

 

Just… our minds.

 

I'm an intellectual.
I should be smiling at this.
Why is my heart bleeding?

 

 

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From a heart with nothing to do while the mind makes a point...
Written September 16th, 2005

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  • The.Stars.Go.Blue
    October 13, 2005
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    PURE BEAUTIFUL! It...sadly...reminds me of how I try to be and how I try to act. I know what feelings you're talking about very well...and life shouldn't be that way. I hope you experience the most out of life that you can, good job on this poem.


  • Lucky-Charm
    September 17, 2005
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    This is so sweet.I related to this.I love reading poetry that I relate too.Enjoyed the read.Thanks for sharing.


  • wbiro gold member
    September 17, 2005
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    Thanks for the comment, BattleofBlood! Ironic, you see now there is more than just a battle of blood going on here!


  • wbiro gold member
    September 17, 2005
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    thanks, Stella, a very useful comment!


  • wbiro gold member
    September 17, 2005
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    thanks for the comment, karma... it was useful!


  • wbiro gold member
    September 17, 2005
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    thanks, zee, yes, underneath our cool exteriors there lies the heart...!


  • wbiro gold member
    September 17, 2005
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    thanks for your honest comment, mizz! May you write with both your heart and mind!

  • wbiro gold member
    September 17, 2005
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    Thanks for the comment Lyrical... yes, we may strive to bring out each other's hearts, but it is painful!

    Edited on Sep 17, 8:01 because ''.


  • September 17, 2005
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    this one brought a tear to my eye,well done


  • BattleOfBlood
    September 17, 2005
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    I can relate to this more then you could image, and I'm sure a lot of others can to in their own way. The logic going against the heart thing kind of reminds me of Vulcans from Star Trek. But I understood the meaning of this and I loved it. Keep on writing.
    Blessed be,
    LeFay

  • Stella Shall
    September 17, 2005
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    This reminded me of a rant from 'Alice in Wonderland-through the looking glass' i am not sure which character as of yet though but i do really appreciate the highlight of the division between the heart and the mind using the symbols of mathematical problems and solutions in contrast to those of the emotions. A rather intersting play on words as well I really appreciated this piece for its originality form and subject matter.

  • nolonger
    September 17, 2005
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    owwwwwwww ouch, This was amazing, filled with emotion and i get the feeling of trying to steer clear of anything complicated, but its so hard to, its much easyer to get sucked into the void of lust desier and confusion, yea,, anyhow the end killed me , left me..... , this said alot to me, I like this one alot, perfectly woven
    always
    ~ vini ~


  • September 17, 2005
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    very creaive and well done interesting the flow back and forths draws the reader into the poem.
    I enjoyed reading.
    "No time for hurt.
    No time for healing.

    Just… mind.

    I’m an intellectual.
    I should be smiling at this.
    Why is my heart bleeding?"

  • zee1
    September 17, 2005
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    This one sure hit home - I was that person for most of my life, understanding and experienceing everything through my head, until one day something happened and I was flooded with emotion, it was very difficult and sometimes still is, but its a healthier way to live and I wouldn't go back even if I could. My need to say this much just shows how deeply this touched me, it is beautifully written and flows easily, a wonderful piece.


  • Lyrical Soul silver member
    September 17, 2005
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    This was physically painful to read. It sounds a lot like me except I don't have to "tell" my heart to stay at the door...I try to make it come in and it runs and hides I'm feeling this piece so strongly. Great job!!

    ~Lyrical


  • mizzamerica91
    September 17, 2005
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    This is an amazing write, you did it well, and i thourghly enjoyed reading it. It is a sad, and yet deep poem, which is good. And the words make the poem flow like lyrics in a song, playing with the music. You spoke your heart, and that is effective.
    Well done,
    Mizz


  • wbiro gold member
    September 17, 2005
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    Thank you for the comment, honorary mom! Yes, life is less painful without the heart, but so cooooooooold!


  • wbiro gold member
    September 17, 2005
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    Glad this poem caught your eye, Ms. Jewel! Now can I post our poem yet? lol!


  • Night Hope gold member
    September 17, 2005
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    Noooooo...This one hurts, my Friend...dammmnnn...Ya can't use one & not the other; it just isn't done that way...not by Poets, at any rate...Sighhh...Geez... Ok, ya made your point quite nicely, methinks...yikes... Wanda


  • FallingSideways silver member
    September 16, 2005
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    sounds like cool intellect's sharp barbs are at work...not only can it wound you but others...
    ~Swt


  • poetryality silver member
    September 16, 2005
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    The heart seemed to be beating extra hard in a effort not to allow it to feel, but the brain was working over time in avoidance. I think in the end the heart will win you over and that nothingness need will dissolve. LOL This is clever and speaks volumes to the need to just be in sinc rather than in love. GREAT!

    Much Love,
    H. Mom
    Edited on Sep 16, 10:52 p.m. because 'typos '.

  • Gogetalife
    September 16, 2005
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    Wow wbiro., this is really a master piece..i do get many thoughts from here..the mind can be a winner sometimes but not all the time though and it is always right..when the heart take over..it can even be right or wrong..the heart doesnt know logic or understand math..it only understand those deep within feelings that even the mind with its inteligence get stuck to solve..lol
    great job..very strong piece


  • wbiro gold member
    September 16, 2005
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    lol I think you understood enough, my brightest angel!


  • SexyAngel0418
    September 16, 2005
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    aww... This is really sad and really deep... If it wasn't almost 11:00 at night, I probably would have understood this more but it's kinda over my head... lol

    Hugs,
    Beth

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