My brother, he’s a cherub
with his cheeks a rosy glow,
he visits when you call him
with his sturdy little bow.
But here of late he’s tired,
all his arrows seem in vain--
Instead of love he brings about
a heart that’s filled with pain.
So, I sat down with mother
to hear what she thought about
a restful holiday for him--
No email, fax nor cell.
The tricky part, convincing him
to rest more than a day,
so I broke his blasted arrows
and I threw them all away!
I bought a first class ticket
on the Concorde of his dreams,
with window seat and room enough
to move his wings at ease.
He clapped me on my shoulder,
his eyes held demon gleam--
And said, “your name is Stupid,
but not as stupid as you seem.”
I’ve had enough; I’m tired, I quit!
Instead of love, they’ll now get spit--
Unless YOU take the bloody job,
for “stupid is, what stupid does.”
OK, so I took the job!?!
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Just a silly ditty 
Written September 16th, 2005
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Funny and cute!
hahahaha!
I LOVE this poem. So funny and cute and something to post and quote for Valentines Day! Very nicely written and good flow. It has such charm, it almost seems like it should have a nursery rhyme sound/tune. I could see this being read to kids. It would evoke a ton of laughter!
Great work!
Luv, ~Kitty {{{{
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Funny, but needs work
Funny, and nice rhyme, except the third and last verses. (excluding the funny concluding line of course). I would suggest that you drop the third verse completely - I don't think you lose too much of the meaning. And work again on the last one. And also the line about folding the wings, which also doesn't quite rhyme. That's the disadvantage of rhyming. It creates constraints and sometimes causes one to alter meaning, or lose the rhyme. I think this needs some more work to be perfect. -
Excellent
I loved this poem of yours..So cute, and creative..I really loveeeeee this poem..Excellent, written so well..You have me smiling.
Blessings ,
Betty -
LOL this is great Sandy I really enjoyed the way you wrote this it was totally original and ingenious. You started my day off with a great laugh. I could see this on a greeting card or something like that. Nice work.
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This is cute. It is good to read something that something that is dramatic or 'bashing' as has been the thing of late. Keep it up!! Athena
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Glad to see a funny one once in a while, no really. The picture is great too.
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This is funny! I like it! HAHA, made me laugh.
keep in touch,
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This is lovely. I adore humorous poems, they are so difficult to write successfully and you have done it. Humor requires intelligence. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this wonderfully funny write which by the way has a great flow. Well done.
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funny as dude.......keep it up
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awesome
hehe Very cleverly written and cute. I liked it very much. Excellent job. Well-written! Keep up the great work!!! :-) -
This is a cute little ditty. Fun to read. You picked a great way to end it!
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HAHAHAHA!!! The poem is funny and entertaining,I laughed when I read the last part,hehehe!! Good job!!!
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love this keep it up
lol that was very very good I love love poems I'm going to add u to my favorites. I'm srry I used up all my appuld but tomarrow I promise I'll vcome back and appuld this k -
lol, cute, very interesing picture too, I like the purple hair. Cupid's job must be tough but someones gotta do it, eh? Keep up the interesting styles of writing!
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If the picture didn't make us laugh, the poem did. Very funny indeed. A great last line. Keep writing.
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Oh my dear This is / was No it still is too funny. You know how to make people laugh or in my case rolling behind my desk what cause new problems because there is not much space here. My head stuck between the boxes. But between us My family is not the only one thats insane The worsed one that has cupid's name. Honey you did a fantastic job here with this. And contest or not This was gold for me Big Hugs Your PC Hermi the Dutch red neck
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