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Fall Proposals (Ya-Du)



Cotton-candy

Pink pretty clouds,

Softly sailing

Veils bringing news,

Vowing nightly changing autumn hues.



Leaves spinning down,

Dark red brown, their

Lush gown in sway

All-array; fair

Display, mixed with wavy golden hair.



Author notes

This is the picture I saw riding home from work tonight, this AFTER the sun was already down... Lights from the small city I go by were hitting the underside of the clouds, making them stick out very distinctly against the evening sky.

The second stanza for this was inspired a day later, as I was baby-sitting a golf tee-off spot for a benefit for my school.  I was watching the leaves fall, noticing them spinning like little wheels as they fell.  The rest just came the way it did because I wanted to relate it to the first stanza.
Written September 16th, 2005

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  • pentopaper
    September 19, 2005
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    Oh, how I love the fall and all of its glorious colors! You depicted them beautifully and vividly in this gorgeous Ya-Du. I do love this form! Very, very nice job!! ~Karen~


  • mrepoet613
    September 18, 2005
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    You got it...great minds do think alike.


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    September 18, 2005
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    Bravo! Standing in Applause

    OMGoodness! This is exceptional with the additional stanza. Thank you for letting me know about it. Absolutely Beautiful. Bravo.
    Bravo. Bravo. ~Pam


  • Samplette gold member
    September 17, 2005
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    Gracefully written, and perfect. Once again, a beautiful entry.
    Thanks for taking part in the contest.
    Sam

  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    September 17, 2005
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    BEEE EAUUUU TIIIIII FULLLLLL

    oooh. AWESOME. I loved you last line here especially. so soft and what imagery. Beautiful.
    I am going to do more of these. What a unique challenge. Best of luck in this contest but I think you've definately GOT IT! ~Pam

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