Will you remember me when I am old
remember all the things I've ever done
and tell to all, the stories you've been told
the stories of my life which have long gone
Because they're valuable to some I'm sure
the life I lived I did not live in vain
Go tell them how I loved my roses pure
in early mist with little drops of rain
And when I'm gone don't grieve too much my dear
for I was happy in so many ways
Please keep the humor that I loved to hear
because with humor also laughter stays
Although my life has reached September's dawn
I won't be old until December's gone
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English sonnet
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A contest entry
- Sonnet Time by Frodofan.
300 points, ended May 20, 2006, 13 entries
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the laughter is important
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Thanks for your comment, you're right, laughter is very important.
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This is a nice sonnet. I love the feeling and emotions you placed in it. I'm not the best educated on the sonnet form, but I think you could lose some of the commas you placed in your poem. There just seems to be an excessive amount of them that kind of hold back the sonnet feel, but again, I'm not an expert. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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Thanks for your comment. I don't like the commas too, but they were required in another contest. I'm going to remove them, they're distracting.
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bittersweet
Somewhat sad, but also beautiful at the same time. Good that you can say you didn't live in vain and this would be such a nice piece to leave behind. Very nice. Thanks for entering. -
Wonderful
Wow this is one to bookmark and well it reminds me of the old Mayor Jimmy Walker's song. Will you love me in December as you did in May? I will have to come back to this one to applaud and definetly will bookmark. -
I really like this poem! Brought a smile, and yes... no one is really old until December is gone!
'JustADutchie'... your English is very good! En geloof dat maar van een andere 'dutchie'
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Thank you for this. This brought back memories of my father, telling me not to be sad when he passed, that his life had been good. I kept that in mind at his funeral, I smiled for him and now share his stories often. You captured these thoughts perfectly.
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Thanks. Hope you did find your brain, though sometimes it's just as quiet without don't you think? LOL
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awesome write!
wow. that was quite interesting. i really liked it!
well. i'm off to go find me brain. it ran aways this morning. 
laters
♠ dyei
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