If I had your heart I would not let it fall.
Like it has today tomorrow and yesterday.
And I would not let u fall or let u cry sorry that I can not help you .
I wish I could
But I do not know what to say this is some though .
I want to say
Love you always Joe
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Written September 16th, 2005
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nice
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well, i see some kind of sarrow, and the rhyme scheme ids great.
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Short, but really sweet. The reader can tell that you really care about this person. The only thing that was awkward for me was line three. It was a little long, and you should write out the word "you." Other than that, I enjoyed this.
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aww thats sweet, and joe must feel happy xP. I enjoyed reading this, you did a good job!!
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Adorable Write!!
Aww...such a short and sweet poem....
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Very full of feelings and emotions. You could cut back on the shortened versions of " you" and other things. Write the word out fully, I would advise not shortening them. Other than that, full of feelings, and often times, feelings are louder than words themselves.
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Feeling speak louder than words
You heart speak for you and from what I see you care a great deal for this freind. Many forget the way of expression speak more thatn saying the word. You wrote this really with your heart
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cute and likeable
yep, this is really adorable, yummy and soooo cutie pie, mmmmm, i like this poem it's so bubbly cute and short, good for a quick read, hey, nice, keep writing thejoe, this is certainly not a BAD write, it's a cute and nice one!
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awwwwwwwwww!
this is such a sweeet write! youre a sweeetheart... don't be the last to let her know that you love her! kk loved it! take care and thanx for sharing! muaaaaaaaahz
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thanks
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hey this is good short but good talk to lter
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