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Campfire Dancer

enchanting dancer
on broken wood
the bright yellow flame

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All comments and suggestions welcome.
Staring into the flame of the campfire...it's captiving like a dancer.
Written September 16th, 2005

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  • Stick Bug
    March 4, 2006
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    Thanks for the comment.

    As for your question, I find RPGs by doing a LOT of searching (mostly big name games stores like GameStop). Some of the games on that list, like Vanguard Bandits, I hadn't even heard of until five minutes before I bought it,
    That said, I'm about to resort to buying games online. Some games are so scarce and in great demand (or others, truly rare with limited printed copies) that I've only them once or twice in my life, if even at all. That and I'm really getting tired of not finding any copies of Dragon Warrior VII.


  • Aisling1221
    March 3, 2006
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    It IS enchanting like a dancer...I love the metaphor! ^_^ Anyway, VERY well written! Also, how do you FIND RPGs? (authorpage) Anyway, be safe, God bless you!
    ~ ~ Courtney ~ ~


  • CatastropheWaitress
    February 22, 2006
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    Hello there, old friend. :-)

    As usual, your haiku(s?) intrigue me. :-D Watching a flame is most definitely an enchanting experience. Especially under a starry night sky. Anyway, hope all is well.

    Cheers,
    Em


  • Intimadater
    December 20, 2005
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    this is incredable i love its to perfect for words

  • pozo
    November 8, 2005
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    I love a good haiku I loved this poem, keep writing because this was really descriptive- you are one of the greats at haiku I think
    All the best,
    Pozo


  • Venessa
    October 24, 2005
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    I like the idea of this one. nice imagery. can't say as I have every seen a flame that is bright yellow though. perhaps a mixture of bright colors but I am just nit picking good to read you again my friend.


  • silver bugs
    October 11, 2005
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    Wow...You painted such vivid picture in my mind with your words. Such much said in only a few words. I love haiku....it's beautiful. Ive always thought of fire as a dancer. Great job!
    ♥
    ~Lana


  • coolmommy
    October 7, 2005
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    i liked that you put broken wood and not like sodden wood or somethin else lol, good one.
    Edited on Oct 07, 4:14 p.m. because ''.


  • X Like A Sunset X
    October 6, 2005
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    I really like this because in short words you depicted alot of imagery. Wonderful job


  • Enira
    September 18, 2005
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    I'm so glad you've written another poem - it's so nice to read something else from you, Adam. You know....I never thought of a campfire in that way. The flames do seem to dance. I always focus on the traveling smoke and the beautiful colors in the flames.
    I congratulate you on a great and unique analysis.
    o^_^o
    ~Grace


  • Sara Bellem
    September 18, 2005
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    Very Interesting, its nice to read a write from you Adam ... Sorry it took me so long to read and comment, Thank you for your friendship and commentary, not only are you are great friend, you are also a wonderful poet ... Sara
    Edited on Sep 18 because 'typos '.


  • crisstiena
    September 16, 2005
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    Methinks you get better and better at this.
    This one stirs images of moon-misty nights
    and fire dancers. Excellent stuff.
    Hey Nova ~ thanks for the comments. ~ criss

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