sit on Father Fondle’s
lap to
listen to
today’s bible lesson
inhumanity is an
inevitable human
instinct...
but Sammy Sodomite
suddenly slips you a slender digit
with a pixilated smile
date rape drugs, double dildos
he probes you
in a stall
in a men’s room
in downtown Hell
and written
in limelight lipstick
above the ads
for tranny whores
Jesus is a popstar
and the devil does drag
heaven-sent, hell-bent
god smites a fag
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Written September 15th, 2005
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Hi this is quite dark, it took my breath away as you certainly don't hold your punches, a little to raw for my taste but I am sure it will be a success,all the best, Di
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This is a very interesting poem. I like the almost choppy feel to it. The way the text doesn't line up in the colums. It adds a nice sense to it. Great write
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Excellent
A dark, dark poem. This depicts an unfeeling world of predators and prey. No other distinctions between people are even attempted. I found it deeply disturbing in its depiction of how some find justification for their activities. The language is brutal, and employed to great effect.
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This is so awesome! I LOVE IT!! keep it up. so well written.
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This is a great controversarial subject to take on. Tonight must be such the mood among the poets because this is the third one, although most interesting, I have come across. The others didn't dare touch sex with the clergy, devil, god, dildos, holy father...all in one poem. Right on! That is bold. Humans and their sexuality, like their religion, their politics and their money...all endless Pandora's boxes of inspiration for artists and writers. You have talent, wit, and boldness! Keep writing my friend.
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I agree with you 100 on this... Being a Christian & constantly surrounded by it, I find it repulsive. You put this together beautifully: word choice, emotion, visuals... Bravo, well-penned.
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I totally agree with you on this subject %100, although I believe in god, I have trouble trusting churches and so-called clergy, they like to distort what the bible says to fit what they believe and pass it off as gods word. I was actually asked to leave a church because I challenged some of the doctrines and strange ideas being spread around by a So-called preacher. Very nice poem, Keep it real!
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Righteous contradictions
of holy heresy, hypocrisy.
thats a tongue twister if ive ever seen one.
interesting poem. different. i like it. a good job with writing this.
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Talk about wow. I like the for, the wording...the subject. Bookmarked.
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I have felt this way many times in my life about Church, but I have moderated a bit since then. I do not like indoctrination or closed-mindedness at all, and some churches seem to use that as their prime thing. This was very true of some churches, and some people, but I don't agree completely with it. It is good though, interesting form.
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