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Coming Winter (Ya-Du)


Autumn weather
Brings the early
Winter chill's smell;
Breezes tell all
Farewell as warm-hued leaves fall.

Breath-vapors seen;
Tangerine leaves
serenely drift
While winds swiftly
Blow, lifting them high and free.

Smoke-scented air
Wafting where the
Skies share the night,
With clear, bright star,
Small light that's seen shining far.

Author notes

I enjoy reminiscent scents, one being smoke on the cool-evening wind... You know the seasons are changing when you smell it.  Immediately, my mind pictures dead, rotting leaves in the street gutters, and people wrapping up in flannel-lined, denim jackets.  And, there is NOTHING like a fireplace on those nights!  And also, I remember walking out on chilly nights, seeing my breath, and the shining stars above.

Michigan is a wonderful place to enjoy the changing seasons.
Written September 15th, 2005

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  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    September 17, 2005
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    YIPPEE

    Oh GOOD. GOOD Good. I am so very pleased to see a trophy here. You have penned a fine Ya-Du. So talented. Such a beautiful verse. Congratulations. You have certainly earned this one. ~Pam


  • pentopaper
    September 16, 2005
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    Wow! Three stanzas all pacted with wonderful imagery! I was lucky to come up with two! The descriptions are excellent from beginning to end. The winds do tell all, and finally signaling fall here in Missouri. Fabulous write! Best of luck in the contest (although with the talent displayed here, luck is not as needed) ~Karen~
    Edited on Sep 16, 5:13 p.m. because 'ooops typo'.


  • Samplette gold member
    September 16, 2005
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    Well, bravo!! You have presented the form well. I think this is the first three stanza one, and you have done a brilliant job! Thank you for entering the contest.
    Sam


  • slender spider
    September 15, 2005
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    I was just trying to describe to someone how its as much the smell that signals to me, a new season in addition to colorful trees, rainy seasons and tender spring greenery. I wish i had this poem to refer to at the time!
    Nicely done.


  • melphleg gold member
    September 15, 2005
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    wafting where definately sound better


  • Mamabekaboo
    September 15, 2005
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    Superb

    I miss the changing seasons. I wanna see take a picture.


  • heismysong
    September 15, 2005
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    Think I should change it to "wafting"?

    Thanks for being gracious!

  • melphleg gold member
    September 15, 2005
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    Beautifully descriptive. Autumn is such a wonderful season. I think you have the form, fudged a little on 'ev'rywhere,' of course, but it works. Nicely done.

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