A perfect world
no more fighting
no more wars
every bodys peaceful
and happy
and kind
and everyone's bored
right out of their minds.
Call me crazy
Call me bad
but stopping all fighting
isn't the solution
I had.
What I'd rather have
is shit we can solve.
No more of this
It's gonna happen
so accept it
and move on
That ain't my style
Let's get a few heros
to fight for a while
Real heros
no more fake celebraties
not doing shit
Let's get people
kids should look up to.
Throw in a sword
and a dragon or two
And you've got a solution
something I'd like to do.
After all peace is not
the absence of war
Peace is just
just a little bit more.
So instead of no war
and interst dissolves
let's get some problems
shit we can solve.
Author notes
I hate feeling powerless. If we lived in the world I've created We'd all have power for something (yeah, all the motivational speakers are going \
Written September 14th, 2005
A contest entry
- Create Paradise...and then...BOOM!!! by p b without the j.
450 points, ended September 30, 2005, 4 entries
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An interesting idea; for me, a perfect world is the one we have, minus the murderers, rapists, arsonists, all that; petty thiefs are fine, but big-time criminals are a no-no, and thus woudln't exist. There would be pain and a little bit of suffering, but also an infinite number of chances to turn all that around, and wisdom and common sense would abound.
This needs some improved mechanics and usage of punctuation, along with spelling and grammar. Otherwise, it fits this contest quite well. Thanks for entering, and good luck. -
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Without sadness, how can we truely know happiness ??? There is not Utopia, nor will there ever be. Lets face what we got and get on with it. Good imagery and word flow. Likey - Likey Very Much 
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