This aperture is discovered in the catacombs of art
amidst much darker omens than even hope can allay,
(which fey loves do ignore and disobey),
where urgent fingers ply the mortar, cry
such that impediments do part,
where tangled breasts heave tangled breaths
through minute clefts,
where such tempests play!
A chink here allows a Thisbe to see her lover,
to unchoke passion-swollen throats to speak
plan to meet,
(though the prowling omens have forbade),
and lips are press'd to the cold, cold wall -
would kiss but for the thickness of its rock!
Accept they, instead, to rendezvous
beneath the moon
and, loth to part, curse the art
of this wall's foundations laid.
Willful lovers by the dozen are writ in our myth,
(they are etched lore upon our impetuous heart),
who see not wilder denizens of fiercer dark,
who scale walls of fate and injustice
in jaded haste for lovers truth,
who are caught by another passion
older, stronger,
which to a lover's cries harks
no different than to any other
brought to woe by jaded haste,
of thought, and fear, and guilty start.
They beneath moon and tree,
are freed by Fate's bloody kiss,
freed
by Love's sacrificial sword
such that beneath the moon and the tree
by Tragedy they married be.
A contest entry
- PREWRITES CONTEST....PREWRITES CONTEST by Summer Dawn.
450 points, ended July 31, 2007, 24 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Rhyme and Flow part 6 The Wall - 50,000 points series by cricketjeff.
4000 points, ended August 1, 2008, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Thank you for your entry in the contest, while there appears to be some rhyme in the poem, it is far to erratic to afford the flow and rhythm that is required.
Sue and Jeff
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very strong language in this write. sounds very shakespearean. thanks for sharing this wonderful write.
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could you possibly adjust the background for me during the contest so it will be easier for me to read? it would be greatly appreciated
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all adjusted 'n stuff
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Interesting poem with good classical reference. I liked the narrative of this piece. Thanks for entering my contest
All the best
Pozo
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