So lost in the darkness
So far from the light
I sighed at the dawn
I cried in the night
No hope for tomorrow
No care for today
I watched in stunned silence
As life slipped away...
I'd heard rumors of Angels
But do they exist
Or are they just visions
Just ghosts in a mist
I begged for an answer
To my desperate plea
And heard rumors of Angels
That no-one could see
I stumbled and staggered
On life's bitter path
I tasted the sorrows
I drank of the wrath
Calling in anguish
For some kind of sign
Of good things to come
And peace to be mine...
I heard rumors of angels
Who healed with a touch...
Fables for children
The simple and such
For none came to save me
When I took a fall
Just rumors of angels
And no help at all
Author notes
Written March 25th, 2004
A contest entry
- Dark and Depressing...Please enter by XHollowXEyesX.
700 points, ended April 6, 2007, 119 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Darkness Rising by Redrusty66.
625 points, ended April 9, 2008, 19 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Hiding Your Wings. by November-Dani.
550 points, ended December 22, 2008, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Christian Poetry by steal-my-scene.
700 points, ended January 27, 21 entries
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Nice flow. Not really what I expected but well... thank you for sharing and good luck.
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Wow, that was amazing! Your rhyming flowed very smoothly, it was beautiful.
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The rhyme scheme is perfect, none of it seems forced and it just flows from one line to the next. It is so sad and yet still beautiful. Excellent job! Good luck in the contest.
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I really like this one. I think you have a wonderful way with words and your rhyming flowed so well. Very well done to you. I do feel that there could have been more behind this though. Just the same i very much enjoyed reading it. Well done and thank you for entering my contest. Best of luck to you.
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I loved this poem, I loved how you ended it. Maybe I'm just having a bad day but I can totally relate to this at the moment. Thanks for entering!
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Very nice poem.
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Great scheme and flow, excellent use of vocabulary and wordplay. It brought the images/feelings alive. Nice construction as well. "I drank of the wrath" is an awesome line.
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I liked the vision of time slipping away, and the flow of this.
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something about your rhyme that makes it easy to read. Even when it seems hopeless and dark like this it's a pleasure to read. Thanks for re-posting this
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This is beautiful. You have a wonderful way with words and a great imagination. The imagery here was awesome to me. Very well penned!
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I never tire of reading your poetry even when it is dark and hopeless like this. The rhyme and flow cause that I guess. I'm glad this at least took silver; of course the contest must have been rigged ... lol. It should have captured the gold
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This was so emazinng. I loved what you are saying. Flowed perfectly
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I like this. This reminds of the song "Angels watching over me
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For none came to save me
When I took a fall
Just rumors of angels
And no help at all
I think, with you're poem here
I have no hope for a gold trophy
The flow, the rhyme, the content
So very perfect
I hope you never leave this site
if you do, let me know
so that I can print every one of your writes
Im serious, don't forget that
NeveR ♥
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Wow, this is absolutely stunning, I love it. It flows so beautifully, it's so sad and perfectly written. It's basically just taken my breath away. I don't even know what to say! Well done, this is one of the best poems I have ever read, no doubt about it. Thank you so much for sharing it! Good luck, I think you have a great chance here! Take care xox
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this is a beautifull poem. I have mixed emotions towards it though, I find it so sad and depressing but yet at the same time there is just something that makes it so beautiful and uplifting. It must be the style and flow of the write, you did an amazing job.
great work.absolutley loved it.took my breath away.
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ahhhhh. this feels so hopeless. So much of your poetry is like this so I'm glad I've actually seen your beautiful smile. It could light up a room. There are angels you know; good friends that lighten the heart when you are down...your rhyme and all that is perfection as always.
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the feeling of loss in this is almost suffocating...it catches in the throat and makes it hard to breathe. the search but never to find...how depressing. amazing poem...your imagery and flow were perfect...dazzling even. I love your work...it creates such places in my mind.
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oh that was so sad. Beautiful flow and words.
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Beginning with such hope of promise that you might find that peace. Morose emotional response. Unfortunately, and I don't know your situation if any, one must experience a stark peice of life to find an angel. You may want to check and make it life's in verse "On lifes bitter path."
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wow... this is awesome... flowed so well.. and well wow...
I love the idea and everything to this poem...
this is the best poem Ive read in a looong time..
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I like this... rumers of angels are no help at all. very practical, and touching.
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this grabbed me. i love it and excellent rhyme. personally, i find rhyme very hard to do, so good job!
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I have to keep my faith that here are indeed Angels
that walk among us, However I can relate to the pondering
questions put forth, but I wonder if sometimes we would
have fallen even harder if there was not an Angel to catch us.
Great poem
warm thoughts
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When you find them, send them my way...I love this poem.
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AWWWWWWWW. I loved this poem. It was so sad and self-existent. This is really a poem. I realle enjoy reading poems that rhyme, and this one rhymed perfectly. You really have an imaginative imagination. And I really like that in a poet. The poem is really sad. I agree with Flyer, this poem is really touching and graceful. To tell you the truth. there really are angels. Whether u believe it or not. I am not just saying that because I go to church, I'm saying it because even before I started going to church I believed in angels. So, please, whatever you do, do not give up hope.
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Aww...I am sad now. But that's not a bad thing, this is amazing, so dynamic and fluid and GRACEFUL. And that's coming from a dancer. Ehh, I totally agree with Ingolion Liritano, you are an amazing writer!! I will definitely be keeping up with your work-great job.
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Wow. That was... Beautiful. It's on a whole different level than my writing. I don't even feel like I'm worthy to critique it. It was great, very emotional read, and very impacting. Keep up the good work.
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WOW!!! This ia a very touching poem, it has so much emotion in it. I liked it a lot, AWSOME job. Later.
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WoW! This is avery sad piece.
I love the way you have penned your thoughts though. It flows very smoothly across the page. The repetition works well here and adds impact to your words. You did a great job! 
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