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Blowing Away in the Wind

 

 

 

There was a leaf, kind and gentle
endeavored to keep it fun and light

as it found it argued with the tree

once more than often.

The leaf reels in autumn now,
clinging to a tree
whose season of friendship
perhaps has ended.

The leaf's efforts in collecting sunlight
had become quite irritating to the tree,

which had many other broader, newer leaves.

As winter approached

this leaf, ever slow in such matters,
finally realized it was time to let go.

So he let go,

and with a last unreturned look,

he blew away in the wind.



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Original:

 

This leaf was kind and gentle
and kept things light and fun,
even when it argued with the tree,
which was once more than often.

Now the leaf finds it is autumn,
and that it clings to a tree
whose season of friendship
perhaps has ended gradually.

The leaf had discovered
that its help in collecting sunlight
had become quite irritating to the tree,
a tree which, after all, had many other
broader and newer leaves.

A cold winter fast approached
and this leaf, ever slow in such matters
finally realized it was time to let go.

The leaf let go,
and with a last look unreturned
blew away in the wind.



     f

           a

         l

                      l


    i


                n


                                     g




Author notes

On the complexities of friendship.
Written September 13th, 2005

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  • wbiro gold member
    September 15, 2005
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    Thanks, Poo, you know how I like to be spurred on to continue improving a piece until it is as smooth as a baby's bottom...!


  • ShaShay
    September 15, 2005
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    I was shocked to say the least. So different from your usual, but done very well. A few rough edges but hey,we all have those when we step outside the box of our norm. I think ou did a great job.
    ~~~POO~~~

  • wbiro gold member
    September 15, 2005
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    thanks for the comment, leo, it always spurs an editing eye!

  • wbiro gold member
    September 15, 2005
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    Quite enough, Ms. softly! thanks...


  • whispersoftly
    September 15, 2005
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    no deep and meaningful comment sorry apart from its brilliant and i love it well done x

  • wbiro gold member
    September 15, 2005
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    thanks for commenting, Dragonsong, yes, time has a way of changing things...


  • leo2
    September 15, 2005
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    It is ironic how many beneficial and strong relationships wither with time and fall to pieces...Gone with wind.

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long


  • Dragonsong silver member
    September 15, 2005
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    wow! This is an awsome poem, for everything in life has a season, and just like the changing of the season a time comes when even the most special of friendships sometimes come to a nutural end, we always want to hold on, even when we know that eventually we will have to let go! A very special piece! Thank you for sharing!


  • wbiro gold member
    September 15, 2005
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    Thanks, Zonia, but hopefully I am just being overdramatic and it's not as bad as it seems! But you are right again, I did use the sorrow to write this piece... maybe some happy pieces for you next!


  • wbiro gold member
    September 15, 2005
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    OK, Kimberly, you made me do it, for the first time in my life in a non-satirical way... how do you like it?!!


  • SexyAngel0418
    September 14, 2005
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    WOW... this is an awesome poem AP daddy... You did a really great job on this one... It is so descriptive and vivid!!!

    Hugs,
    Beth


  • Anna Emkah
    September 14, 2005
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    This is such a sad poem. I feel so sorry for the leaf, who was collecting sunlight for the tree, but is no longer needed and therefore has fallen and blown away in the wind. You used beautiful metaphors in this poem, but knowing that this is a true story it gives me a soar feeling in my heart, because I know what the leaf is going through now. Great write Wayne. Well done. Anna.


  • Touchof1der silver member
    September 14, 2005
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    Just some editing suggestions for mommy...

    This leaf was kind and gentle,
    kept things light and fun
    even when it argued with the tree
    which was often.

    The leaf finds it is autumn
    and clings to a tree
    whose season of friendship
    perhaps has ended.

    The leaf has discovered
    it helps to collect sunlight
    which irritates to the tree,
    with its many other, broader leaves.

    Gradually a cold winter sets in
    and this leaf finally realizes
    it's time to let go

    f
    a
    l
    l
    i
    n
    g

    with an unreturned look
    it blows away in the wind.

    I agree that friendships, like all relationships, go through changeswith the passing of time. Some stay, some go, some remain for just a season or two, but whatever the case... they all serve a purpose at the time. Your words are very wise my son!
    (`'•.¸(`'•.¸ ¤ ¸.•'´)¸.•'´)
    ~~~Touchof1der~~~
    (, .•'(¸.•'´ ¤ `'•.¸)`'•.¸)

  • wbiro gold member
    September 14, 2005
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    Thank you, Night Hope, yes, this leaf is slow in such matters...


  • Night Hope gold member
    September 14, 2005
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    '...Now the leaf finds it is autumn
    and that it is clinging to a tree
    whose season of friendship
    perhaps has past.
    The leaf also discovered
    that its help in collecting sunlight
    had become quite irritating to the tree...'


    A unique perspective on Autumn & Friendship, Wayne...well done...I'm sorry you know this sense of sorrow in things ending... Wanda

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