If you will die for me
I will die for you
I would give it all up for you
Forever it will be us two
I will take the gun
And end it here
If you promise you are not far away
And you will soon be near
They will never let us be
So let us show them this is love
We will finally be set free
To spread our wings just like a dove
So I take this gun and smile
Soon we will be in each others arms
I will go first, you will be soon after
Finally away from all life’s harms
Author notes
Written September 12th, 2005
A contest entry
- lover's suicide by Trueloveneverdies.
300 points, ended November 30, 2005, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I've always tried writing a Romeo and Juliet poem, I love the story. ^_^
I like it, god job. Keep up the good work.
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I like the poem - and I love the story and wonder behind Romeo & Juliet - forbidden love. You put the story nicely - short and sweet. I liked the imagery of 'spreading your wings like a dove'. Great write xxx-xxx
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that is a wonderful poem so heart felt and sad but beatiful well done xx Cheryl
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Well this is a wonderful write. How sad was this story? Pulling the trigger, not wanting to be without your soul mate. This is true love. Thank you for sharing. ~~Shannon~~
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I love the story of Romeo and Juliet and really appreciated and liked the way you wrote this poem. It is very creative and really tells the story well without giving too much away. Superbly written.
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wow-u described romeo and juliet wonderfully in just a few words. you are a great poet-keep up the talent.
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good write!i take it thats more the film than the play?nice emotion
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Ahhhhhhhh this is sad, hope your not going to do it?
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awww great write. you got the emotion captured perfetly, aand you wrote it as if its personal to you
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