You are beautiful
Vibrant with life
You're absolutely shimmering
You cut me like a knife
All I want
All I need
All I love
Is you
All I lust for
All I plead for
All I strive for
Is you
All I am
All I see
All I do
And all I want to be
You
You
You
You
Be with me
Stay with me
Dance with me
Love
Hold me
Help mould me
And melt with me
Love
Reflect upon me
In the pool we've created
Let your eyes sparkle
Let my soul be sedated
Slice me open
Let me bleed a tear
Pump my heart full of you
Full of you, my dear
And caress me
Touch me there
After all it is you
Nestled, beating in fear
If only you knew
What you did to me
What I want to do to you
If only you knew
Would you let me breathe?
Would you, yourself, want to?
All I want
All I need
All I love
Is you
All I lust for
All I plead for
All I strive for-- YOU.
Author notes
9/11/2005: To my sunshine.... who will never know how much I love her...
1/23/06: Won an honorable mention in "Who and/or What Ignites Your Passion? (1 Day Contest)" [Contest] by Angel of wolves.
Written September 11th, 2005
A contest entry
- Dark Love by OurxBeginning.
300 points, ended May 24, 2007, 26 entries
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Very interesting piece. A lot of emotion and meaning is in this. I can tell it's from the heart. I liked the repetition in this, works well. Thank you for entering and good luck.
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this was a great write...i really enjoyed reading this...the use of repetition in this poem was really great and flowed really well keep writting your talented and good luck in the contest
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This is an absolutely brilliant piece of work. I love the way you wrote this song. I write music too. Thankyou for your entry and good luck!!!
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Very nicely done!
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Took my breath away
I wonder who this is about?
You already know how i feel about this..
I Love You
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Great job there Dead Kennedy Roll, a bit not to my liking, but never mind
Thanx for entering and good luck in the contest
best wishes as always
-Cool Oasis-
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I really love this one, my new favourite :0)
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Awesome poem James! ^^ It's a sweet poem yo! ^^ ~Courtney
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no YOU the man, hahaha. Thanks for the comment. Probably see you saturday.
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great
oh james.
you continually write great poems about your feelings.
they continually capture mine.
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Sweeeeeeet wording. This would be great with music. You write some wicked good lyrics. The repitition was just right. Great write!
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Yes, she read it. Things are complicated... As for her falling for me, that is something that is even more complicated. Wish I could explain. ~James
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That was so amazing... Did the girl read this?? I wish she did, she'd definately fall for you so hard.
Take Care, James.
Jasmine
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That was beautiful, and full of soul. Nothing as simple as that.
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aww... that's so like cute! haha... it sounds like a song kinda... i have one question though, why wont she ever know? You should really tell her...
i like the repeatitiveness of this also... great job hun!
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Good job! I thought that it was well written and flowed great. The repetetiveness of the word "all" gives it a romantic feel. Although to me it seemed to flow more like a song. Keep up the good work.
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I really liked your response to greenie23. It was incredibly well-worded... actually, I loved it! I might have to save it As for the poem, it was incredibly well written. I am bias because i love repetition in poetry... I think it adds so much power to the words. Well written!
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To want her more than life would mean that I would die just to have her, which is impossible. You can't have someone if you're dead. However, I would willingly die for her.
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Well to start off I thougt that your poem was very lovley and pasionate in more ways than one. To think such vivid thoughts of a person is to want them more than life. I think that you did a great job on this poem.
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Well, if you do ever write another part to this please drop me a line. I'd love to read it! Another thing, good luck with this girl and maybe sometime she'll have the same feelings for you
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I really like this poeM! And I love the title! It is so great, thsi is such an amzing poem! You are so talented! Great write!
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Thanks... I actually was thinking about making another part to it. I have some other line ideas, but they just didn't fit.
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Thanks.
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She isn't my girlfriend... but I wish she was... Okay... even though I hate the Rolling Stones, I guess it's like Philosopher Jagger once said: "You can't always get what you want."
As for her reading this... She might stumble across it... But I don't think I'm going to say anything about it to her... I've told her how I felt about her already. All I can hope and pray is that she realizes that I mean it, 'cause I do. Le sigh... -
I really like this. It shows that you do care a lot and that you'd do anything for this special person. The only think that I might suggest is adding on a little more. I'd love to read it if you decide to do so
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OMG! This is so romantic...kind of seductive and on the borderline of being erotic. Well, I loved this piece and I am sure that your girlfriend will love it too! The question is if you will show it to her...I have written and drawn so much for people yet never given it to them! LOL!
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Yeh, I guess the "All"'s kind of remind me of the song "Eclipse" by Floyd.
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