INVITATION
A cosmic game of hide and seek
I contemplate how strong meets weak
Fishing for souls through ice cut holes
Who sadly search
For a polar bear
Among the hot sandy dunes
Convinced he was never there
Anywhere
Flinging toys in a rage
Across the playpen
Whose bars are always a cage
And never the arms of love
That hold us until
We respect the alarm
That keeps us from harm
He is near!
He is near...
Only a whisper
Away
Author notes
You don't have a soul. You have a body. You are a soul.
C.S. Lewis
Connecting with the creator is the purpose of life.
Written September 11th, 2005
A contest entry
- riddle me this by hungermuncher.
382 points, ended April 17, 2007, 14 entries
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Lovely entry! unfortuanately I needed your name in the auther notes to check out your home page. Thank you for your entry! Keep well!
Becks -
I like how you worded your poem.
"He is near...
Only a whisper
Away."
I believe this to be true.
you did a great job on your poem.
Thank You for your entry.
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Oh yes, I have kept track of your writing, pen friend. I lvoe your writing about nature...you have a very pastoral way of writing about that which you love.
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oh, wow, this is awesome......so much in these lines..and, as a reader, of course, I read into it what I wish...but indeed....it is but clearer eyeseight away..that hand,
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This was a great write. Thank you for sharing your talent.
Well done and good luck.
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This is a really beautiful piece. And i absolutely loved the message behind your words. The imagery was great. Keep up the good work :-) Thank you for entering!
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Yes, we are in the end of an age. I think we are in the end of the ignorance age. I think many people are waking up suddenly to see all the things that are described in my poem. All we have to do is reach for the wisdom and grab it. It is everywhere. There is so much we have to realize and take into account. I saw multiple meanings in many of the lines and these lines were my favorite:"Who sadly search
For a polar bear
Among the hot sandy dunes." I thought those were the most thought provoking ones and they just did it for me. Of course the rest of the poem did too but these just stuck out and I found myself looking for all kinds of pussible meanings. I love writes like these. This was seems pretty open for interpertation, so much like my own. Good stuff. -
This definitely gives you food for thought. Wow. Your implications in this piece with such trivial words was great! Again, another use of a fantastic quote!
A whisper of such knowledge can travel thousands of miles. All one has to do is listen.
Thanks for entering,
Oxy -
Took me a while and I needed to read the comments to get the symbolism. I liked your poem - thanks for entering and Good Luck in the contest.
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me too its one of my favs.really wanna go and see them live again...but hey your poem, really cool i liked it.
thanks for entering!
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When they say to prove He exists, I tell 'em, 'Prove He doesn't...Just because you can't see something doesn't mean it doesn't exist; you can't see the wind...or Love...I also tell 'em the quote from Albert Einstein; when a reporter asked him, 'As a scientist, how can you believe in God?' his response was, 'As a scientist, how can I not?' I always liked that one...I've always believed in God (& He's always believed in me, too)...I only have a problem with Man's interpretations of Him, usually for their own benefit...My favorite two words in the Bible are 'tender mercies'... Wanda
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As for you who lead my little ones astray... It would be better for you if a millstone were tied around the neck and cast into the sea. Atheists don't get there by themselves. They find good arguments from intelligent people who are mad at God and find all the paradoxes and inconsistencies among "christian people" many who are using means at their disposal to build their own influence and power base. Everybody gets to do what they want... I believe if the Atheists are honest... they will find the contradictions in their own beliefs. How can you know god doesn't exist? You can not see what is on the other side of the refrigerator door, much less behind Orion...
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'...Who sadly search For a polar bear Among the hot sandy dunes Convinced he was never there...'
Hmmm... Interesting penning, Ben~jammin...Thought I'd peruse awhile in your closet...
Great hints of the Spiritually Divine within us all, my Friend...It may not be the proper thing to say, but when someone tries to tell me they're an 'atheist', I tell 'em to hedge their bets; I'd rather believe & be wrong than to not believe...& be wrong...I don't figure God'll be too upset with me for that one...after all, it makes 'em think (so they tell me) & He did invent humor...
I think one of my favorite church experiences was when the preacher made a joke from the pulpit...I'd never laughed out loud in church before then...it was always so serious...It left an impression...God wants us to be happy...Cool riddle poem, Scribe...
Wanda
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This was a wonderful piece because it was so inriguing.. I was so confused and then I read it again and Lol well I am still a little confused but not as much.. so I read the comments and I finally understand almost completely.. But I dont care that is was confusing to the mind because it was so interesting and I love when something makes me think like that.. I did not understand the bear thing until I read a comment that someone posted and that is so very clever.. and unique.. I too have never heard anyone refer to God as a bear.. you have done so well here.. lol I am just rambling.. I am sorry I am just so baffled.. anyway enough with my mouth I thank you for entering my contest this was truly amazing and I found this just so amazing.
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Perfect entry! i was hoping to get some riddles in poetic form! and im very sory, i couldnt help myself, i read all the coments hehe but the answer realy isnt what will get you a trophy, i look at the way you constructed it, and led the mind away from the answer and let me tell you you did an expert job!!!! im so happy you entered my contest!
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Ah! So much lovely symbollism! This is a wonderful poem and you have a lot of talent. I've never seen god be symbolized as a polar bear so congrats! You've tottally got me all jubilated.
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Hello, you still out there?
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He walks a tight rope, dropping clues that he is there. Subtle carresses that peak our intrest, twinges of emptiness driving us to seek him. But never so rude or overpowering that he denies himself that which means the most- our choice to choose him, follow his ways, join in his redemption plans for the world.
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excellent
The symbolism is perfect in your poem.And it's true,He's only a whisper away...So,why do so many of us wander lost,when the answer is right with us all along? -
Reminds me more of a children's poem, but it's got a good message. Good job.
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I think that you have yourself a truly interesting write on your hands with this. The different images that played across my mind’s eye took so many turns as I read. Nice job.
~ John
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I see this piece in two different ways...1 sorrow, and loneliness with death so close 2 sadly searching with hope just right there, but hard to be seen. Nice Write. And thank you for commenting on mine...Remember.
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it's lovely. the symbolism is perfect, very fitting to the piece.
-rach
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