Death surrounds you as you cry,
For in thine eyes there is a struggle.
See it is one year past since last you wept,
Yet still you feel unable to rest.
Now none continue to comfort you,
For all your loves have gone.
Yet still you pray that your suffrage is at an end,
However it has really just begun.
See none can help you with what’s been done.
For what’s done is done and can’t be undone.
Still life will go on if you allow and love shall return.
If only you leave death BEHIND!
Author notes
emotion in this poem is a sad one revolving around death
Written September 10th, 2005
A contest entry
- Become a part of my AP Family :) - PREWRITES ALLOWED by MaMa-2-be-Cindy.
550 points, ended November 30, 2007, 20 entries
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very good
a chilling and indepth write. we must all come to terms with death, and relize that life does indeed go on. something some of us still need to come to terms with.
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This is a great peice. We all have felt that way at one time or another when we have lost someone that we love, I know I have. Keep up the good work!
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A very deep write full of heartfelt emotion.
Thank you for entering it
Cindy
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this is a wonderful poem the imagery is excellent very well done to you xxx
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you have a great poem here and I like the message...I do see room for improvements to make it even much more worthy of your efforts you spent so much time doing....If you like Id be happy to help you with it....just message me If you care for my honest imput...Im no master...but sometimes we all see things us as authors cannot...being we are in the midst of things....very nice writing all in all...
Malabu -
wow i like this poem soo emotional, good luck
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A very deep emotional poem, you did very well with you poem, it is deep and sad, I enjoyed reading it. Good luck.
Jennifer
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good poem dude nice job work hard in this contest who kno someone could be better than us
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thank you this is a peice that took me a long time to write aand i appreciate the compliment
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wonderful.
This is an amazing write. You have done so well. I really enjoyed reading this piece!
Good Luck In The Contest!
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