Silenced trees
except when the wind blows.
Their voices are heard in the morning
talking to each other.....
but no one comes to visit.
I lived here six years ago,
and they were all so friendly.
what has changed?
I've offered
tokens of friendship
but they were shunned.
Sitting on the back porch, coffee in hand
....I wait
hoping....maybe they will come.
I'm lonely for my old friends.
I see them coming and going
they are all so busy this time of year.
I'm one of them,
our migration just completed.
Here I sit
waiting
for the birds.
Author notes
option 2
I don't think this is up to 20 trophy standards, but I needed to write it, and I wanted to honor YOU by entering your contest. It was the only place it fit. 
Cheryl 
Written September 10th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- 200th Contest Option #2 Trophy Awards by Samplette.
300 points, ended September 23, 2005, 2 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I thought you were talking about neighbors for a second there because sometimes neighbors can be "for the birds", too. haha (Sorry, I had to say it.)
Your adoration of and connection to birds is very touching. I'm going to start paying more attention to them, too. I think I've been taking them for granted too much.
Mark
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The birds will come; you'll hear them sing,
And feel the flutter of each wing,
Their twittering will fill the air,
There will be music everywhere.
Sometimes they have to fly away,
But only to return some day.
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Thank you so much Sam!!!
Cheryl
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This was beautiful...sadly do. When we move away....home stays in our heart, but as it changes in reality it stays the same in our heart. We can go home again...but it will never be the same. A wonderful write. Thank you for entering and this will be judged in option 2 as stated...
Sam
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awesome
all the lovliness you can find in a poen great job
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Yes, very nice imagery used here Magic. Waiting can be half the fun, can't it? Knowing the inevitable return is imminent, but yearning for it nonetheless. Nicely done.
peace
doug
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Perhaps if you put some bird seed out or bread crumbs.... you would not have need for the neighbors.... a lonely cup of coffee in the morning is more likely to get you a conversation of friendly hellos with the birds then the busy neighbors who shun your friendly nature...Is there a reason for this other then the visual you have painstakingly penned...or is it just lousy neighbors ignoring something worth while? lovely writing all the same...enjoyed it very much..
Huggs
Malabu
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you should never spend much time waiting...enjoy every minute...for they are irreplacable...but unfortunately it is true that most of us just sit and wait....
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yups it flowed too good ....i loved the way you have written it ....the spaces indicates the perfect pauses Simple in its words yet makes an effect with that moonlight pic
keep going
ankita
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Nice photo. Otherwise, not my scene.
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Nature 's melody
It is really a touching write which is revealing a kind of unseen relationship between nature and the humanbeings strongly in terms of communications . The thoughts are very innocents and and to some extent mystical too giving a divine touch in background as it is in the picture too. The words are travelling like a musical tune very gently from begining to end and expresses it self very beautifully. The flow of the write is very expressive and very soft to feel with it..I really appreciate this work..prabhudayal khattar -
this is a nice write with a wonderful imagary and flow I will say the structure didnot work for me but hey it is just me
love and light
blaze -
Your pen let the ink flow out! In fact, this piece is so wonderful! You have really shown me that there is so much in nature to write about...yet, it is so hard to put into words! You have really outdone yourself! LOL! I wish you the best in the contest...oh, and I am another commentator that believes that there is a deeper meaning to this piece!
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Wow i love the ending..such a twist on things..the picture is awesome too.. i feel that it draws the person into the read..great write all in all keep it up
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This is very powerful the images are very stunning it's very serene and a very beautiful poem the way you pulled the reader into your work is very amazing the penning of your words is brilliant good luck in your contest and thank you for letting me read your work..
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I liked this write, and in observing the comments have wondered if the birds are as some have queried whether there's a deeper meaning. I can't help but think of the term 'bird' for a woman, so wonder if you might mean women by the mention of birds. It may only mean that while you are at this point in life, taking stock of the things that gave you comfort in the cycle of things, like the birds on leafless trees.
There is a lonely feel to this poem, you say you lived there sometime ago and it used to be friendly aand you wonder what's changed. Maybe its the memory that's changed of how it was once 'friendly' while you wait for your old friends or the birds. Very complex it seems...or I've made it that in questioning the poem and its meaning......birds are lovely enough to be the friends whom you miss...at any rate brilliant work and presentation. Has a very blue feel. -
This is very nicely written. Beautiful wording and an interesting idea. I loved every second of reading this piece. Nice job
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Wonderful
This is a lovely image and comforting words. Almost like a prayer. We all go through changes and it is hard, but I look back and don't regret too many of them. Some of my human friends are birds! Wonderful write! -
great write!
a beautiful piece, full of longing. your words pulled the reader right into feeling that longing, sadness. -
not only did i love this piece but you went astract with the entire write...
good luck and keep up the good work -
I am not good at the waiting game usually. But when I find myself lost in nature, it seems to come natural to me. I guess man makes me want things to speed up. But nature proves them wrong. great write.
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I like the way this plays almost up to the end, I can almost feel the silence which accompanies waiting, it is an atmosphere you have created. I too think this may go a lot deeper even if not for you, for others who may read this - good write.
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Very nicely done this is well written and lovely images present in a very soft gently way you can feel the longing this is a very well written piece
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I am wondering if this is really about birds. It is very sweet and lovely but has me thinking if there could be a hidden meaning somewhere.
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Still early in the season - wait a bit longer. Sounds like you are missing these old friends, but I am sure they will come around eventually. Nice write.
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I loved this..sad though, lots of emotion, and just wow, keep it up, and I really wish you the best. I hope to read more
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Cheryl, time will dispell the anguish you are feeling at this time. You know this but still it is hard to sit and wait. You are very aware, waiting is harder than doing. Really good seeing you here again.
Your friend,
Jim -
Oh no! This is such a sad poem. It's so awful to see some things change. This was a beautiful poem. I enjoyed reading this.
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Ah Cheryl, I see you do the same as me. My favorite thing to do is to wake in the morning,coffee in hand. Go outside before the world has wakened. Just as the sun begins to open her sleepy eyes. And listen to the world. The first to waken are the birds. The chirpping of the hungry little ones. I often chuckle to myself thinking. Not even in the world of nature does Mom get rest. I wonder if mother bird doesn't think to herself. Just 5 more minutes! I'm listening to the birds outside my window and just realized your fall does come a little earlier than ours. I think I will whiper them a request, to visit you. And send you my love and frienship upon their wings, to put a hug in your heart and a smile on your face!
If you should see a sparrow
perched within your tree,
He brings to you a little gift,
a hug for you, from me.
~Michelle~
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crystaldust 11-09-05 16:10
You make your sadness beautiful for us when we read your poem, Cheryl. They will come to you, I'm sure they will. Perhaps we can wish them to where you are. Lovely to hear from you again. Blessings and love. Joy
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I know this is hard, but i cannot begin to imagine the
difficulties invoved in relocating so many time over the
years. I know your heart, you will have new friends, more
than you've ever had before.
With all the tumoil of my wife's mom passing, i've not
had a chance to visit my yard much to clean it and to take care
of the birds needs
Reminds me, i must put out more seed and refill the hummingbird feeder, oh and add water to the birdbath,
you know, to make a welcoming place for them when they
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I'm sure the birds will return. It's just a matter time before they recognize what a friend you will be to them.
Sincerely,
Leo Long -
Hello Cheryl,
Just this morning I heard a Bob White claiming his territory in loud shrieks outside my bedroom window and my thoughts drifted immediately to my friend in Pennsylvania who has introduced the entire AP society to so many of her "bird" friends. My heart goes out to you while you are still in transitional status, my dear friend and rest assured, the call of the Bob White is just one of many notes that your friends miss you too.
God Bless and best wishes,
Del -
It's all timing isn't it? I hope that some new friends will visit you soon. The geese are already migrating through here.
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Cheryl, this is such a lonely piece. Your birds will find you again...just wait and see. Peace and love to you my sweet friend.
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Oh, I miss your birds, too. If I see any of your old friends, I'll give them a heads up on where you moved.
Edited on Sep 10, 6:14 p.m. because ''.
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