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The Plan

It's been a long time,
Since the first time
I fell in love with you.
You played me like a lovesick fool
And your plan just couldn't fail.

Told the judge that i beat you,
Gave you no support and i had no bail,
The judge threw down his gavel,
and lovesick ended in jail!

Then you went out
And had your fun,
Then your years began to show,
You played it smart,
Had a change of heart,
And wanted me back again!

Well through the years
And hurting pain,
My love was always ther,
And this time like that lovesick fool
I thought that you still cared.

So a few years passed,
And at last,
We settled down outside of town,I retired and dear i never dreamed,You had a plan, that was deadly sound!The poison that you fed me,Each day a little more, Until I died ,And you got rich,Then your heart filled up with pride.You told all again I left you,And this time it was for good, You should have checked your poison supply, For it was running out,faster than it should. So here we are together You sure did have a plan, But wasn't that a hell of a way, To be sure you kept your Man?

Author notes

didnt know how to make more room for verses  please forgive
Written September 10th, 2005

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  • Bertie
    September 28, 2005
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    Cute Poem sis, poison huh? Maybe I'd better check my supply it might be running a little low LOL. Yes heartbreak is hard to accept. You and I both know that but we both bounced back. Good luck in the contest.


  • Camlek
    September 14, 2005
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    Ok I don't know what you intended but I have chosen to take poison to actually mean poison, as in she was poisoning you. That way it's funnier than if it was just another love poem and fits the contest better. Well done in that sense! xxx

  • Wordpainter
    September 11, 2005
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    Thanks for your comment My heart aches for anyone who has been hurt. I've been there too only my love was lost forever in a fire, then the players showed up, so i know about heartbreak again thanks and i would like to read some of your poems also. thanks wordpainter

  • Stealer
    September 11, 2005
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    Exuized

    This poem touches me in a close way. Had a girl do this very thing to me. I gave her my heart and she smashed it. Making my look like the bad guy afterwards too. This poem is a powerful peice and I love the way your story shins in to it. Keep Up the good work.