Even the most intelligent of people can
Not understand and comprehend
In full or
Gather insight into the true
Meaning of the
Acclaimed mystery
That creates the most
Inscrutable
Conundrums
One word that describes me.
Author notes
This is my acrostic
Written September 10th, 2005
Option 1
Purple Monkeys Fly At Night
A contest entry
- Wow Me With One Word *Platinum Edition!* =] by Anjole-Of-The-Artz.
1700 points, ended August 9, 2007, 34 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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omg lmsoooo
My cousin and I are sitting here discussing what this poem means in two different perspectives that if you look close are exactly the same and yet we find the need to keep repeating ourselves when that's all we're doing and every time we try to re-explain it everything comes out exactly the same as before and I GIVE UP!!!! lmso. I love it though. <3
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Wow! After reading your comment about my poem, you really made me want to come and read this one that you talked about! I am so glad I did because it is WONDERFUL!!!! You did a fantastic job with this! not everyone can write acrotics and you did an amazing job!!! I REALLY LOVE it!!!! Thank you so much for sharing! It's awesome!
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I read the poem and it was wonderful. I read the comments and wondered how many read the authors comment. An acrostic poem is an arangement of words that spell out a word or motto. To make it seem to be a sentance makes this even better. this poem could stand alone and be good even if it wasn't acrostic! Great job, The Shaker
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This is an amazingly awesome poem. I have never read one on allpoetry like it. I never even realized it was an acrostic. It was very well hidden. I liked the ending, it was a good way of summing it all up. And I like the run-on-ness about it all, as if it were one long sentence. Good work on vocabulary. Overall, amazingly well done!
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amazing
wow. good poetry is hard to find by hitting the random key! this is amazing. the imagery. the fact that it hit me in layers. first, i went through it too fast and had to read it again. then i got it but i needed to read it again to place it in my memory. then again to ensure that i got the concept and search for any relation to my everyday life. then i WANTED to read it because of how it makes me feel. like the energy in a room where a bunch of nervous people are taking the test that can save their lives. an amazing write and a very good read. the only thing i ask is that you add more! -
im hard to get a good word from and i will tell ya if i didnt like it, but this was good, good ider and diffrent,, i like diffrent,,
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A wonderful accrostic. I liked the ending, added some punch to the form. Truly artistic!
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
Wow...there were lot of other comments on this, so I was wondering if I should bother, but I figured what the hey.
I'm not very observative I think, I didn't notice it was an acrostic piece until I read the author's note. It was an interesting poem...deep and clever. That, and the word conundrum is just cool.
Nice poem.
-Meg
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This is awesome. It is simple but it doesnt explain everything in fact it is quite enigmatic which works beautifully.I love it you cut off at the end you say people can never truly understand...... but they still expect the poem to continue and for you to tell us what you are but you dont.Leaving us even more perplexed and confused WHICH IS AWESOME. Keep yourself a secret girl its the best way to go a little mystery and confusion never caused anyone ony harm. Good write. Keep writing.
~*~!Jasmine!~*~
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On the whole, this piece did carry interest, but I'm not sure what it's trying to do. I just don't think the last line "One word that describes me" line is needed. It gives the poem a kind of egotistical poem, it's as if you're saying look at me "I'm uncapable of being comprehended" by the greatest minds, such is my complexity", when in reality everyone is amazingly complex, so given that it's impossible to give a single word to describe yourself, the word enigmatic was especially informationless.
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Well this piece was certainly short to say the least and managed to take me an extensive period of time to fully appreciate. Your format was almost like a run on sentence that continually danced around the fact and that captured my attention immediately, and as for your ending it was superb, it tied the piece together and left that ever present mystery in tact. A very worthy poem.
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I'd like to say thank you for your comment. I appriciate it so very much. I love comments that question my piece. In responce I will say this: I did choose this word to discribe me, though I didnt not intend for it to seem as if I were trying to sum up myself in this one word, it just happens to be one word that describes me lol. Second, on the subject of "meat" I was shooting for a short simplistic poem with as little words as possible. And maybe it could have been deeper, but I happen to like it just the way it is.As for the last part about the brothers and sisters...i dont fully understand. Thanks so much for your comment. It is so greatly appriciated.
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Clever! I read this first off without realising it was an acrostic, I had to then go back & look again...I liked it even before then, and now I like it more. Hard to say why though...Dunno, I like how it can be read as one long (interesting) sentence. Good work.
Oh and thanks for yr comment, I hope my rather waffled, random explanation might have helped a little! (though I suspect not...sorry!)
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This is a EXCELLENT, piece. Truly, it is. I know how you feel and understand, being an enigma myself... Great read!! Really!
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good but needs a little something more
i think that you could have gone into a little more depth with this one, i see that you were shooting for a little something to sum up yourself, but every human is so complex that there is no way to just shove it in one word, but it is a good idea for the end of you poem, but i think that the body could have more meat to it. like why do these "people" effect you, do you understand, if you do then how could we reach out to our brothers and sisters to help them to understand or even get an idea of what you are about. thanks for the write and have a great day toodles
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Very Good.
As if this needs another comment, haha. Reading this put me in a philosophical mood, made me think about epistemology and everything. I liked this write a lot. -
So deep..yet displayed in such few words. This piece was a lot more signifigant than most I've read on this site, very good, deffiently a happy clappy for you
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at first i thought you were going to be talking about love.
you must be quite enigmatic,you fooled me... (since this comment sucks,you've no ned to return a comment )
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so simple... yet profound in some strange way. i loved it!
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And you are so right. This was really interesting and you said so much in such a short poem. You must have thought really deeply and spent alot of time on this...and for that I applaud you.
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Very Good
Nicely done introspective poem. Keep up the good work. Take care.
Michael -
Firstly, I would like to thank you so very much for commenting on my poem! It means a lot to me that you like it because you're such a great poet. In regards to your suggestions, I understand what you are saying and it makes perfect sense to me, but I tried to make my poem an acrostic, and if I move the words it will no longer be that. lol I know I should have made it clearer from the begining.
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Deep, very deep, I liked it, but I felt that it was really being bogged down by the constant grammatical errors I noticed in the piece. First off:
Even the most intelligent of people can
Not understand and comprehend
It should be cannot or can't, the especially if those two lines are trying to express a singular thought or action.
Not understand and comprehend
In full or
Gather insight into the true
I tihnk that you should move the phrase "In full" up to "Understand and comprehend" because to me it throws off the rhythm of the peice and makes it choppy.
One more thing, I think that if you threw in some commas in certian palces it would really help separate your thoughts and lines, improving the flow. Right now it's just like one big jumbled mess.
Now for the positive things, I really liked the message in this poem, and you even got it down very quickly and shortly, and very well done. You've got superb word choice and language and your pece just seethes with intelligence ands beauty, and overall, I think if you tweaked it a bit it could be an even more marvelous piece -
that was a good write. such words in so little. and it speeks the truth, which is really aamazing.
you did a brilliant job
kacey
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