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A Poem About Her

 

 

 


Does she want me to write a poem about her?
I would drop all my epics, discourses, and sojourns
and write a thousand poems about her,

 

for the world is weak without strong hearts.
Her’s may not be mine in deepest love,
but her heart has been mine enough for me to care.

 

If we were the only two here right now,
it would be easier,
but no less joyous.

 

If she asked, then would I write about her with the same desire?
Perhaps, and yet she holds back,
so my desire for her is secure.

 

Living in each other’s minds
in different ways, perhaps,
while reality, ever ironic, takes a different course altogether...

 

Does she look for a poem about her from me?
I can only hope yes, for, you see
there are a thousand poems for her still in my heart,
aching, aching to be set free.

 

 

 

 

 

 

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To 'her': Thank you for everything you've done for me and have given me. This is my small way of returning your love. I wish it will become more, and in many ways.
Written September 10th, 2005

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  • Candy6
    April 27, 2007
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    good job on your rhyming poem and stanza.


  • because its bitter
    September 15, 2005
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    Most love poems are too mushy and unrealistc for me to enjoy. Every now and again I read one that makes me go "awwwwwww" and then I secretly wish it had been written to me (I guess maybe not in secret sometimes...). Anyway... this was one of those poems. Inspiration is one of the most sincere forms of flattery, and if someone can inspire you to write, sing, draw, whatever, then that is fantastic.
    Keep writing her poems, and good luck.


  • wbiro gold member
    September 11, 2005
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    Tnanks for the comment, leo... well, in the virtual world you CAN have the other's mind and heart... the problem is the heart tends to want the physical, too, and creates an aching longing to 'complete' the relationship! Such is the limitation of an Internet relationship... but if the heart and mind are all you need from one another, then this is the place!


  • leo2
    September 11, 2005
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    I can relate to this one in a very deeply personal way. It's a no win situation when you love someone you cannot have even if they love you back. With that said I would still hope she would want a poem from me too. An expression of my love that touches her from the inside out. Well done.

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long


  • Blkwidow77 silver member
    September 11, 2005
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    uh... First of all... it wasn't French, it was Spanish. It means "For the love of God". LOL

    And by the way, this is your second and final warning, drop the mushy stuff. It aggitates me (the flowers). If you can't project your meaning into your words, then what kind of poet are you? But I don't like those flowers, toss one my way again, and I'll make sure to spank you publically!

  • wbiro gold member
    September 11, 2005
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    Thanks, mum, I had to read your comment several times before the words sank in... now doesn't that reflect a son/mother relationship! Yes, one cannot fulfill one's own heart, no matter how hard one tries... and thank you for being there for me in such ways, as I endeavor to be for you.

  • wbiro gold member
    September 11, 2005
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    no truer words were ever spoken, my many-legged (eight?!) friend! Yes, I would surely be deep in trouble if I plunged wildly about and with no reserve... so to ease your mind about me, (and I am quite appreciative to receive your wisdom) this poem was about someone who is about to become an AP daughter of mine!

    Now that is not to say you completely missed with your cold bucket of water here. It is easy to get caught up in such things, as you've experienced yourself. I have been there on AP and have learned and shared such insights and lessons ( see 'Letters to Zeneria from Lovetorn'... allpoetry.com/Story/1462552 ), so don't think too harshly of your new acquaintence!

    Now, I can see that, if my words and poems were disingenuous, and you don't know me well enough to judge that yet, then yes, your words of warning would apply immediately... but I can tell you now that I, and my words, are genuine, and also that I am quite reserved, unlike the more vulgar on this site.

    So I am not affronted by your misjudgement here, blkwidow, and I will value your (hard-won?) wisdom nevertheless, and will carry it with me like a beacon of light into the future.

    P.S. One of my AP daughters speaks fluent French, so thanks for giving me something to send her way!
    appreciative!
    Edited on Sep 11, 6:41 because ''.

  • Blkwidow77 silver member
    September 11, 2005
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    ~sighs~ Por el amor de dios! No WONDER your favorites list is full... my god are you ever a play boy! You sound like my best friend (the male one) from my last years in highschool. We used to always be in fierce competition, as to who had better game.

    He was always a little bit ahead of me (I had a steady boyfriend to slow me down). Which pissed me off to no end, when he would come to me late at night to brag of his current exploits and push me over in the bed (he made a great bed warmer! ^^-^^ ) But that's ok... I won in the end... he fell in love with me, and I didn't love him... end point. Game over.

    Careful lover boy, we all get caught sooner or later, and burn badly for our antics.
    Edited on Sep 11, 3:58 because ''.


  • suseann
    September 11, 2005
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    You are such a flirt! Talking all the ladies up.Just a romantic at heart.And it shows in your prose.Beautiful!~~~Suseann


  • wbiro gold member
    September 11, 2005
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    thanks, Tony, it has become more already! May you find some too here on AP!


  • Anthony-
    September 11, 2005
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    Great stuff! You really do emphasise the returning love. I hope it becomes more. Mine never do. I have a predetermined fateful sycle of some sort. "Such a shame shame shame". Tony.


  • wbiro gold member
    September 11, 2005
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    Thank you, Poo! I think I am maturing a bit as a poet... and you ladies are to blame! lol


  • ShaShay
    September 11, 2005
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    Very Beautifully done. She is indeed a lucky lady. Your meter and flow are perfect for your message. I think this is a wonderful write


  • wbiro gold member
    September 10, 2005
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    Thanks, Kimberly! Now there you go again, thinking all my ladies are young...! lol


  • Touchof1der silver member
    September 10, 2005
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    What young lady does not like to hear that she is worthy and that someone cares for her. Even the hardest heart, if they are honest with themseves, wants to be loved and feel loved and know love. We were created to be social beings and we count on all others to fulfill the the deepest recesses of our being, giving us that feeling of being "whole" and complete and content. You did very well son of my heart!
    (`'•.¸(`'•.¸ ¤ ¸.•'´)¸.•'´)
    ~~~Touchof1der~~~
    (, .•'(¸.•'´ ¤ `'•.¸)`'•.¸)


  • Night Hope gold member
    September 10, 2005
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    '...Living in each other’s minds
    in different ways, perhaps,
    while reality, ever ironic, takes its own course altogether.

    Does she look for a poem about her from me?
    I can only hope yes,
    for there are a thousand poems for her still in my heart,
    aching.'

    {stands & cheers wildly} BRAVO!!! ENCORE!!! SUSTAINED STANDING OVATION!!! HOMAGE!!! Just beautiful, Wayne... Wanda


  • lavender shadows
    September 10, 2005
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    This is such a beautiful poem! Aww, the feeling of indecision of whether someone would like something or not... so often talked about, but not often written about. The ending is so startlingly beautiful.

    You did a great job on this!

    Ms. C (because I can't think of any new nicknames at the moment! )


  • wbiro gold member
    September 10, 2005
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    Thank you, Molly!

  • Molly Densmore silver member
    September 10, 2005
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    I really liked this, is she does want one from you then she has it, who wouldn't?, what a lovely one at that!!! It is always nice to be thought of and seems like you have lots that think of you, so whoever this person is, she is very blessed that you have chosen her from the mobs that have their eye on you. Very well done and very beautiful!!! You have a very beautiful heart!!!


  • Porcelain Doll
    September 10, 2005
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    I don't mind at all... Aw hun... this actually made me cry while reading it... I'm not used to people caring for me like this. It's nice to feel loved sometimes... Yes...
    "Does she look for a poem about her from me?" Yes... *hugs you close* This is beautiful in a way I can't put into words... thank you.
    ~Yours in mind and heart, Amy


  • wbiro gold member
    September 10, 2005
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    Thank you, Karma! Writing does help one's heart through these things!


  • September 10, 2005
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    The ending is beautiful this is very well expressed and crafted has your poetic voice heard well for the reader. I enjoyed reading your poem today.

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