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The Lanturne

The Lanturne


shapes
made by
penning words
will create new
forms

words
described
by adverbs
verbalizing
nouns

lights
flicker
like candles
softly dancing
beams

Del Warren Livingston © Right Now 2005







Author notes

This is a Lanturne...it is a type of Japanese poetry in the shape of a lantern {hence the name}. The syllables for each line are 1,2,3,4,1. Lantern poems are light & airy. The first line has one syllable (a noun), line 2 - two syllables (describing the noun or its actions), line 3 has 3 syllables (further describing the noun), line 4 has 4 syllables (further describing the noun) line 5 has 1 syllable, (another word for the noun).

Written September 10th, 2005

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  • Empathy-eyes
    October 26, 2005
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    This is so perfect, I wish I could of met you. Much love to you and yours, you're going on my favourites

  • CarterTachikawa
    September 30, 2005
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    I'm going back and forth, reading your poetry, and I still can't believe you're gone. My heart breaks when I think about it. God bless you and be safe. You always were an amazing poet. You'll always be one of my favorites.

    ~CT

  • EmotionlessStranger
    September 30, 2005
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    R.I.P. Delwarrenlivingstone. god bless your family.

  • Elfin silver member
    September 30, 2005
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    I did not know you Delwarrenlivingstone but God Bless you. R.I.P.

  • poetryality silver member
    September 28, 2005
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    You were such the teacher!


  • lillianisevol
    September 27, 2005
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    Awesome

    Del you were an amazing man ... how wonderfully you wrote ... I am truly greatful to have read your words and have learned a great deal from just a few of your writings ... you have even sparked a little intrest in me about learning to write with a form ... which I have never done before.
  • gut full of bloOd
    September 26, 2005
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    brilliant poetry... amazing.. intrseting... i devoured each word lyk butter...so smooth and flowing... amazing.. rip...u will be missed..

  • midnight dreamer.
    September 26, 2005
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    This is so....Creamy...Soft, but softer than words can imagin...

    love
    Ashley

  • DeathWhisper
    September 26, 2005
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    This is lovely.

  • Ink Shadow
    September 10, 2005
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    I liked this form, that second stanza reminds me of my own poem "Poem of Incompleteness"...I am sure you would like to pay me a visit!

    D

  • Sai Babas Lotus
    September 10, 2005
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    Good

    All these are perfect lanturnes! Thanks for sharing. The syllable format is perfect and they all make good sense and describe the lanturne form well.



    Charishma
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