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Eternal

Silent confusion
tangled around
romantic illusions
why not press a dagger into
my heart and let me bleed
as you do not weep
I fall to my feet
into an eternal sleep
never to see you not see me.

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Written September 9th, 2005

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  • NeverEndingNitemare
    March 15, 2006
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    aaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh very nice death by a knife good senario never dies in my heart i love the poem good job very nice


  • split-person-ality
    September 10, 2005
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    this is very well i love the part where u say"never to see you not see me" so deep and emotional..great short poem..its soo good..i love how u used the word illusion dont see that often in poetry but it fit so well and explained it alot...great job once again cant wait to read more!!!!!

  • Wall-Flower
    September 10, 2005
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    sad.
    The word choice was beautiful.
    Great poem!