Shamed love
flowing towards my center.
It's foul and unforgiving
and dark and murky.
I remember when the water was pure.
I remember when the riverbed was dry.
I remember how things were right after I met you.
I remember before we ever met.
I'll take unclean water over none at all.
The shore is being washed away.
The sand is sliding into the water.
The River is filling in.
Its mouth is closing up.
I remember when I was whole.
I remember when you broke me.
I remember how you cried when you did.
I remember how I cried when you cried.
Never were more pure tears shed.
The rain is falling down.
The River is overflowing.
The banks are just a memory.
The River rules the land.
You said you would come back.
I remember that.
I want to be The River.
I want you to be my rainfall.
Overflow my heart.
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Written September 9th, 2005
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Wow this is really wrapped up in your emotions. I felt this way when I broke up with my boyfriend whom I'm in love with. We did get back together though. I hope evrything works out the way you want it to.
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something tells me you miss sarah.. well man i think that if it didnt work the second time then maybe you should hope for sun .. not rain.. gather yourself man.. your not who you used to be.. though still my friend.. there was once when i knew all.. and now nothing.. try to get over the losses and moving again.. Peace -
excellent writing
This is very beautiful. I love your comparisons to the river, water. Very honest and sincere emotions.
I really enjoyed reading this.
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great
Jermey, all of your work is awsome. its like i felt all you went through. someday you will be whole again. I am not good at writing poetry but I can say that yours is moving.
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very nice. "i'll take unclean water over none at all" oh brilliant line good luck
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I love this. The second stanza calls to me with every line. There's just something about it, i can't even put a name to it but i can just relate. This entire poem, i like how it revolves around the river but has to do with your heart and your feelings. That amazes me. Great write
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