THE JOURNEY.
My life began in Italy
I was there for just a while
Sent across the ocean
In a cramped and dark style.
I was introduced to glamour
Had servants to my call
They helped to get me ready
For every dinner, every ball.
I’ve climbed the Eiffel tower
And ran from lovers chase
Only to find another
When I wasn’t in the race.
I tipped toed through the tulips
Lost my soul in old Ire-land
Where I strolled the country lanes
And played joyfully in her sands.
Once when I was poorly
For years I didn’t roam
I sat in the darkness
In my home I moaned alone.
My skin became quite tough
From the high life in the sun
I was bursting at the seams
And thought my days where almost done.
I went and had a makeover
Felt better and looked great
Caught a cruise to Miami
And to other US states.
Now I have retired
No one looks my way
Some have said quite boldly
That I have had my day.
I look out a dusty window
Watch people gape and stare
They seem to pass on by
Now I’m poor they don’t care.
Sure… I’ve seen the world twice over
Had my fill with champagne
A little old now and knackard
On the shelf I will remain
Although I am well travelled
I can’t help feeling blue
Is there any one to console?
A good old pair of shoes.
Author notes
Prompt 1
In a list
A contest entry
- Be Prompt by Darkwell.
1050 points, ended August 20, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Awesome! you gave this shoe a great life full of travel an the champagne part made me giggle. Very well penned!
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Fantastic
This was simply wonderfully written. I didn't even realize it was about a shoe until the end. The humor, rhyming and imagery was a perfect blend. I loved it. Good luck in the contest. God Bless,
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wowowowowow thats awesome
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Glad you enjoyed this,
thanks for th comment.
dolores x
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very nice loved the rhyming and the plot...keep penning ...best wishes
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I can only say that the rhyming was perfect. I never felt it was forced at all and that says something. It was filled with humor, had a story and the imagery you used really supported your subject matter. You had me entertained all the way through. The title, by the way, also rocks. Wonderful entry and thank you.
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this is so sweet. its beautiful. thanks for entering.
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Grazie!
Delores, This poem really made me laugh! I'm still howling in my old, worn out Italian shoes!! Grazie... -
arr this is so incredibly sweet i actually did see aww at the end!! hey i'm certain your still beautiful now and that poem definatly was and though it was long it flowed throghout and never lost momentum great stuffxxxxxxxxxxx
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Hi YA! Mickie,
I applaud your very incouraging comment. These kind words is what inspires me to continue writing (Time permitted!)dropped by your site and fell in love with "The empty cup of coffee." like you i am a mother and have five beautiful children, i work as a chef in a school and cook for 950 children each day. i love writting when i have a chance. thanx for applauding my work. tsol. xox -
I loved the form of this in fact I loved everything about this poem. The way it was written. The way it read. The form was perfect and read like a professionaly written poem. I loved the ending and wasn't expecting this to be about a pair of shoes that really made the poem what it was for me fantastic.
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thank you so much for your applauds and comments i am truely greatful and will applaud your comment on me for being so kind. may be you could stop by and read some of my other poems. Slan Slan x
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thanx for your applauds and your kind comments. Slan Slan x
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I love this! Totally wonderful. The love for the old wheathered shoes that once had been a faithful friend. So creative and written so well. I love how you describe the joy from the shoes' perspective and then show how it is sad to be used no longer. That part made me sad.. But all together this was a wonderful poem. Really, really ingenius it was. P.S. I love your name "tsol"
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Cute
lol!!! that is the funniest love poem i have ever read...excellent job!!!!..really cute..and what a definition!!hahhahaa -
this is so cute,lol thank you for sharing this ,,Linda
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