You left me alone,
You left me once more,
You left me behind,
Like I am a bore.
Left in my house,
And look what it seems,
You come back to me,
Sometimes, in my dreams.
I sit back and think,
A wonderful thought,
I think of the joy,
And love that you brought.
No matter what happens,
It's stuck in my mind,
You left me alone,
You left me behind.
Author notes
This is one of my personal favorites. Please leave a comment so I will feel somewhat appreciated...
A contest entry
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you did an amazing poem . well-done and keep it up . such a personal poem with love still there .
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beautiful.
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You know what they say,
If you love something set it free,
If it comes back...tell it its not worth it for leaving u in the first place,
If it doesnt come back... hunt it down and shoot it
A beautifully written piece but someone who can leave someone like that is truly not worth a second chance.
love and hugs,
georgie,
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great
loved the comment that saying was hilarious. thanks for taking the time to read my work.
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This poem is very relateable. Heartbreak is so painful, and it makes you feel like a tiny dinghy afloat in the middle of the ocean. You feel like you can't see land, and the waves just carry you whichever way they feel, and it's difficult to control.
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Ahh I can totally relate to this! Great write, nice flow and rhyme. Very nicely drawn out thought process, remembering the good times, yet unforgiving because he left and you'll always know that. Good stuff!!
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I can relate to this poem very well...
"No matter what happens,
It's stuck in my mind,
You left me alone,
You left me behind."
This part reminds me that no matter what we "were" in the end you left me alone and that I will never forget!
It's alright to remember the good feeling but keep in mind how it ended.
Very well written!
darlintl
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I have felt this way before, it happens to all of us.
May love and light find your path.
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This is Nicely Penned! Good Rhyme. The person was remembering the love that he shared and also remembered that he had his heart Broken! Very Nicely Done!
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This is a nice piece. The rhyme was evident - smooth. Sad and yet looking back with a sort of smile... Nice work! Well penned! ~~
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