Sequenced visions rumbling around
ocean swells pushing me aground
a tempest brewing deep within
my mind lets the fantasies begin
The knight in armor standing bold
young maidens dancing sights untold
giving way to captured hearts
masquerading till my dream departs
The phantom lover waiting to appear
stalking on the midnight clear
dreamland brings thoughts so kind
reality forgotten leaving eyes so blind
Hidden in visions and thoughts divine
nightmares overshadow dreams benign
what blackness hides behind the mask
remains to me still a daunting task
Trapped inside till morning's light
mind's silent screaming or pure delight
will evil be triumphant over good
questions remaining left misunderstood
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Written September 7th, 2005
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Beautiful
That really is a beautiful poem, you expressed yourself so eloquently and it really matches that picture. Amazing! -
Spectacular!
WOW!! The Mysterious fused with the mystical was AWESOME!!
The elusive passion and romance drapped in clandestined
fantasy gave it depth and class. The picture in the background
was OUT OF THIS WORLD! Adding spectacular vision and color! -
Wonderful
Loved the images it brought to mind. Nice flow! Leaves me with the impression of having the ultimate dream and then it distorts all of the sudden and turns nightmarish. Great job! -
The poem was great. It reminded me of Phantom of the Opera. What it must be like inside Christine's mind when the Phantom is seducing her. The ending was really nice. It kind of hung the whole poem on a note that was not yet finish, but in a way it was. Nice job.
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Great job!! i really do like your poem!!!Ilove you added so much of a story to the picture!! Great job again and thank you for entering in my contest!
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GREAT
It is very well written and has a good rythm. -
You weighted yourself with all the rhyming,but as a whole you did a good job.I like that sense of danger that you seeded in the background of this utopian picture...
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