A thousand missing faces-
dead spaces end living.
Bold reality delivered,
by high command's
knock.
Novocaine's pain
in swelling tears,
as dull resides in
the wilted eyes
of war.
Haunting forever
calling the- Unforgiven
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This morn I had a flash of Wars that have occured during my lifetime. But, it wasn't the images of the battlefield I saw. It was the mother with small children answering the door, only to find out, daddy isn't coming home.
Written September 7th, 2005
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EXCELLENT!!!!!
This is a very sad event and hearbreaking... I have been to these and no matter who the person is this ceremony touches your heart... You have written a very beautiful pice, it touches ones inner being. Exquisitely written, AngelicMistress
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This is amazingly done Muddy, I have to tell you that while you are 'new' to me, you have become one of my true favorites. Your words always speak beyond the images created, they make you feel and see for yourself. This was brilliantly penned, said but unfortunately the truth - there are times that I wonder if the end was justified, sometimes it all seems so redundant. Again, this was fabulous.
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'A thousand missing faces-
dead spaces end living.
Bold reality delivered,
by high command's
knock...'
You & I are about the same age, Muddy...we share the same memories & experiences in a lot of ways...this is beautifully done, Scribe...there are far too many that will never come home again...yet, they only went Home ahead of their loved ones, & wait with a candle in the window...
♥ 
Wanderer
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Neat.
This was pretty good. I liked how the first stanza had a really "hard hitting" type of rhyme. I was kind of hoping that the rest would be that way, but it still turned out quite well. Even though I like the strong rhyme scheme in the first stanza, the second stanza was, by far, my favorite one. It seems to me like the novacaine was given a human like quality. Amazing, to say the least. Thanks for sharing. Till next time. -
Wow. No words. Perfect timing. Biting words provoke an imagery so strong...just wow. Good job. Best of luck in the contest. You deserve to win...
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great write
awsome i have a son in the military and i miss him very deeply so i think this is gret support our troops and hope they all get to return home safe . real soon . keep up the great work from cora -
awesome
wow hey this was a great tribute.. i have served on many honor gaurds. during funreals.. not in this one butthe frist gulf war.. and i tell you it is the saddest thing i've ever done.. great write...thanks you for sharing your work with me.. -
Great poem, i love the title it maches the message so well. You've used such great words to describe others pain well, good luck with the contest
~Lynn
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This is such a sad event you penned here. It seems so many of us have memories implanted in the mind that have a way of coming back to us and srfacing when we least expect it. You did a great job here. Good luck in the contest.
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~~~Touchof1der~~~
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This is a heartbreaking poem, You put such a hard and painful subject in such an elequint(sorry if i mispelled that)way. Great Write-Roan
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I think this was so sad, yet I am glad that someone has touched on this subject. No matter what your political position, these are families broken apart and you sweet words capture the pain beautifuly.
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novacaines pain... love the idea that numb can be painful. What a great poem
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Muddy, your heart and the depths of your soul never cease to amaze me. Such a sad and yet heartwarming tribute to the families of the fallen. This goes beyond what I have words to comment so I'll just say "well done my friend".
~Lyrical
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