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The truth is there,
Why can't you see it?
We speak the truth,
Why can't you hear it?
The truth is in you,
Why can't you feel it?
You know the truth
Why can't you accept it?

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  • Wandika gold member
    October 14, 2005
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    Title "Why Can't You...". Leaves a question the reader may click on to find out what it is. The poem is of thoughts which often bounce around in everyone's head for various reasons and situations.

    Jim


  • Frogzter gold member
    October 7, 2005
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    Very thought provoking... Short but it speaks volumes... A title might be something simple like the question you ask in this clever peice...."WHY?"


  • Miserie
    October 5, 2005
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    This leaves a lot to the imagination... truth about what? Nice. I like poems that are both thought provoking and verbally beautiful.


  • tarnishedheart
    October 3, 2005
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    I really liked this, it would have been great for a contest that I did not to long ago called for the enlightened, I asked for people to explain to me why it is that they feel like they know something that no one else does, I wanted to feel the pain of wanting to scream WHY THE HELL WON'T ANYONE LISTEN TO ME!!! anyways, I really liked this one!!


  • Blood Wedding
    September 15, 2005
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    Wonderful piece. Could be about the Truth, the truth of the love one feels, but denies, about the reality of a situation. Sounds so frustrating. A title, hmm, could be Truth. Again, great poem.

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