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Damned Voices

                                              Foolish heart
                                        Foolish world
                                           Stupid foolish little girl
Here they start again......
                                               So
                                      You thought you could conquer this thing
                                         This place
                                                    This reality
                                              Ignoramus!
Planting doubts......
                                   Didn't we tell you?!
                                      Don't you know?
                                                       IT IS USELESS
Causing the tears to flow........
                                                         Don't hope for a brighter day
                               True love does not exist for you
                                              You _are_ cursed
Cracking my heart......
                                       Get out of their lives
                                                                  Now!!
                                                Before you destroy them
I grow weary of this...........
                                   For you are a damned disease
                                              Infecting those happy lives
Shut up!!
                                                           You can't get rid of us
                                       You need us
                                                  Don't you dare shut us out
I'm not listening!
You see these hands
Super-glued to my ears.....
                                                         Don't!!
                                      Listen to us!
                                                     Please?!?!
GET OUT!!!
                                                         ...................
Damned voices........

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Written September 6th, 2005

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  • The starless one
    March 13, 2006
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    got alittle golem in ya do ye? I like this poem. It shows that you dont always have to let your doubts beat you.

  • JimmyCognition
    December 5, 2005
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    Usually all that mixing around and whatnot just annoys me, but you certainly made good use of space- the jumbly'd up position of the inner voices I think speaks on their unwanted nature. I also dig that you actually conquer them, instead of being reduced to the quivering mass of sorrow that I see so often around here.


  • September 30, 2005
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    Its Saweeeet..

    I love this... the transfer back and forth betweem the peice, as if schitzophrenia (or however you spell that) becomes a society within itself within the poem, each running off each other... or I'm stoned... LOL... nope, not stoned, BUT I LIKE IT... nice one....