when the flake of life disappears
when i lye Wake feeling fears
what am i going to do
you don't seem to have a clue
you see right through me
your lies we both can see
now what to do
your love for me is shinning through
i cant take it anymore this silence is killing us
why make all the fuss
why adjust
when we have love we both can see
you have teard me apart with love
now set me free
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not one of my best but i need to say this
Written September 6th, 2005
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I agree with the others! love does hurt! This poem is brilliant! The rhyming is lush! I can definately feel the pain of this poem!
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thanks for the comment
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This is a good write. The pain you are feeling comes across really well. Love hurts, I've never really understood that, seeing as love is meant to be this great thing!
Anyway gd write, keep it up.
Dani x -
thanks for you comment lol your poeyrty is amazing espaecilly your newest so full of emotion and i loved the rythem.
luke -
i can definitely feel the pain. i like it a lot though.
nice rhyming and it doesn't sound forced, which is awesome. great ending too
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aww i wonder who the lucky lady is. love bunny hurts i tell u
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