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My Untapped Desiny

"Down there my love is far too strong"
deep in the core
where there is no light
the place that only God can see
that portion of my soul
that speaks quietly to my heart
my brain
my being

In the depths
where there is no evidence of existence
below the bitterness
lower than the epitome of me

That is where my adoration for you sits
waiting patiently to be discovered

 

Author notes

My last line came from:

Coming Back Home Where You Belong by x-Lilac ThOughts-x
Written September 6th, 2005

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  • silverscent
    September 6, 2005
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    Aww this actually made me sigh. You did well describing love in such detail and in so little space. I really liked the last two lines. Thanks for entering.