mister, misses
a blank face facing an altering void
stranger, an observant bystander
he,she who does not say
taught by lesson, fed first by another
did this event occur from trust?
concern?
they lay us to sleep but only for so long
mister, misses
why do you not say?
engulfing us, the plenty, in question
we are the ones who feel lost
caring stranger, do you care?
do you hear?
why don't you say?
fire, water, earth, wind, and light
they are what i need? they are what i have
affection, trust, love, purpose, and truth
do these make me selfish? they are what i want
mister, misses
would you say in what direction we will ride?
north, east, south, and west
i know nothing more
given life, given questions
lessons and void
i did not ask for this and if i did
do i deserve to be consumed in doubt?
say..
Author notes
if you think ive given into "god" bite me, im no fool. just making a point..
this is a sweet poem to me, very inverted.
Written September 6th, 2005
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ive known about the gd thing for a while now.. i believe in balance, or easier of sense, not having one without the other. some said its vague read my other writing its left with holes so the creative in mind can fill the, in with peices of theselves. an old habbit of mine. and in the comments baout this poem. when i say "god" i mean the bases of all government authority. its back bone for justification. IE xtians, caths. god is just a symbol. whatever. i prefer creator maybe, dont know. i dont think it cares. i dont. bye and thanks read deadangel1700's poems. hers are far batter
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Beautiful poem, made me think
Interestinig poem. I particularly liked this stanza:
fire, water, earth, wind, and light
they are what i need? they are what i have
affection, trust, love, purpose, and truth
do these make me selfish? they are what i want
It was poignant and powerful, asking great questions. They really resonated with me.
You obviously have a talent for asking deeper questions. I don't need to "bite you," but if you're going to dig deep, don't be afraid when you encounter the unknown, even God.
Thanks,
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Still like this second time around too.
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i like this poem, you can interpret it many ways, the wording is gd but i like simplicity whih it has also, welll done tis gd xxxx
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a bit odd in form but that is a good thing also. This one works very well.Very glad you posted it up in the feature area. Perhaps a bit vauge here but not bad at all.
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Interesting, but confusing without know about the god thing -Al
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uhm i am actualy unsure about what this poem is about? but neverthe less i liked it i loved the lines: caring stranger, do you care? do you hear? very interesting welldone
(if its not too uch trouble could u explaine it too me i am ignorant and i would like to read it again once i know wat ur on about please?)
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Nice rhythm and flow to this piece. The subject matter is good - well communicated; bringing to light the questions we all ask ... thanks for sharing this!
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Reminds me of the young child who questions everything you say by asking why? One learns by questioning, but I think one has to stop and take a breather once in a while too. Liked the way you created this.
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Nice job ... awesome though ... I must say very good and it made lots of sense ... keep writing ... I like your style
Take care
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I was confused by the mister,misses thing until I read your comment, I think you could have been less confusing by choosing one gender to represent an all powerful being. I thought somehow it was a transgender confused about life and the world, self questioning, not knowing how to address him/herself. Interesting after I got through it with your note.
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i really like this one mister...awesome! though yeah it is different from your other poems....but it rocks! great job muah!
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