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Rendezvous at Eleven (Long Erotica)










In Collaboration with Touchof1der 


(italics are me)

HE AWAITS!

 

     the hour has arrived
     our hour
     I am in this void,
     waiting...
     then I realize... time zones!
     our hour is three hours apart

 

     I wait...
     the clock slowly ticks
     I think of the poetry
     dripping off her hidden pleasures
     I savor every drop
     peeling away every word
     one at a time,  
     tasting what is underneath
 
     these three hours of waiting will be bliss
     then she will have her way with me 
     then I her, all over again!

 

     yes, three long hours-
     "Let's rendezvous at 11pm" I said,
     but my 11pm arrives three hours before hers
     so I wait and muse
 
     filling her message box with my pleasures
     what will she find when she returns 
     after three hours of my musing 
     all over her body

 

     I will leave a tale of what I would desire
     for it is my time
     her will-power is not here to resist
 
     shall I penetrate before she arrives? 
     No! that must be saved
     for the real encounter
     a mutual climax is the ultimate goal
     of any shared encounter
 
     rendezvous at 11pm- and
     a three-hour time difference.
     I am tired,
     I think, how could I make such a blunder?
     excitement perhaps,
     like the way the finger mistypes 
     or the mind swims

 

     when she arrives, how will it begin?
     softly we dance?
     I dim the lights? 
     we let in the soft moonlight 
     and the cool night air?
 
     that first touch, what will it be?
     a heavy hand that she will swoon to?
     a long, soft caress?
     an unintended bump or rub that ignites 
     long inhibited or completely unforeseen passions?
     a deliberate sliding of
     her clothes down her shoulders,
     allowing for her protests and
     slowly revealing that which has captured men
     from the dawn of time,
     made softer in the magic spell conjured around us?

 

     Or will she move first?
     perhaps an unzip, unbutton,
     violating my very soul as
     I would have violated her's?!!
 
     I must be careful with those violations,
     it may put our mutual climax in jeopardy

 

     What will she want from me?
     to be close?
     letting hands roam as they will?
     to capture me with her curves?
     to lie back across a virtual bed 
     exposing herself to my view?
     Or I, for her long gaze?!!

 

     perhaps it should be her and then I, 
     and then in deep understanding, 
     both; or I then her,
     then finish in our mutual climax... 
     who am I kidding?
     I know there will be no time for such thought
     and any plan will only dampen the heat!

 

     but to heighten the encounter, 
     I will have to strip her words away
     revealing her underlying desires 
     as I slowly tantalize her body's yearnings
     using my heart and mind
     across the expanse of space and time
     and endeavor to satisfy her

 

     will it be a smooth encounter?
     probably not
     awkwardness can be expected
     for the first time...
     what a curse, though!
     messed up by mutual awkwardness,
     that is cruel!

 

I HAVE ARRIVED DEAREST!!

 

a slight breeze crawls into my hair
I part my lids dreamily as
the fire grows within me

 

I eagerly await our time and then
your footsteps come crashing upon me
in youthful enthusiasm

 

I anticipate your touch
the soft mastery that you have
of leaving me a joyful servant
 
kisses, punctuated by
whispers on my neck . . .
"I want you, need you, say yes!"

 

     am I moving slow, too slowly, 
     I whisper, should I be singing?
     does it drive you crazy?
     your hot whispers in return
     drown any misgivings

 

tied up in sultry moonlight
skin on skin, shadows dancing

 

     skin on skin already, 
     you have wasted no time
     and the night is young
   
     what does this skin on skin do to me?
     the man in me responds to you 
     in all the right places
     shouting, "yes!"
     to your neck, into your ears
     high between your soft, unprotected thighs
     skin on skin, 
     exploring 
     our lips and tongues dance
     above
     our fires burn hot
     below
     I give in
     and let nature have its way

 

hear the symphony of passion
hearts can scarcely contain
proceeding slowly,
this ballad continues
as I accept you into my haven

 

     I enter your haven
     we were close before,
     but now we are one
 

 

blood rushes rampantly through us
we move in perfect harmony
slowly in a crescendo

 

your pulse throbs deep within
as the tempo increases
biting my lip in anticipation
the music within plays louder

 

      this rendezvous at eleven
      now turns to twelve
      we have found our perfect embrace

 

      you have captured me,
      I have entered you

 

      slowly, savoring you,
      there is no turning back
      the hands of time now,
      we are locked
      in the ultimate of sensations
      we are doing it!

 

flying to heavens forbidden,
no more can we stand it
crashing together like a cymbal,
the bass inside you blasts in fortissimo
as the music within us blends

 

     layers of our poetry litter the floor, 
     being discarded in ever more intimate contact

 

pure music erupts,
harmonic voices fill the air
as a pulsing bass floods our bodies with ambrosia,
 
     music!
     I hear your moans of pleasure, 
     that is the ultimate music to me!
     to fulfill your body's needs completely
     as I fulfill my own

 

     now it is 1am,
     I am not finished with you,
     you still do not resist,
     and you are not finished with me
     and there is still life in us

     long the night will continue
     discovering, reaching, fulfilling desires

 

my senses are jumbled notes
upon which to stimulate

 

the exaggeration and eagerness
in which you perform
silently upon my body
exhilarate me

 

this dance of courtship lures me 
sweetly and gently
towards eager seduction

 

     I am eager again
     you are woman, I am man
     we do all that women and men do
     together, skin on skin
     I give you all you want
     all you reach for
     all you ask for

     all is smooth

legs spreading farther
hips thrusting more urgently
to the beat of our passion
and to the joy
of this beautiful feeling
beneath love's sacred symphony

 

      Oh! your legs spread!
      unexpected!
      I lose control
      and then I explode!
      rocking the room
      and you
      for several minutes...

      I collapse
      are you satisfied?   
      No! not yet!  
      you are not satisfied
      and gently revive me
      I slowly recover... 

      gentle caresses
      expertly placed kisses 
      deep probing hands
      searching for points of revival

      they are silently found
      and we are slowly awakened once more
      and a turn toward one another
      in a complete recovery

pink folds wet like morning dew,
giving a grand sensation

 

      and once again you draw me in
      fully...
      deeply...
      and I stay

 

my head spins with desire
you the Master of Seduction,
I the Temptress

 

      what does my temptress feel
      as I stay inside you,
      chest to chest,
      breath to breath
      perhaps I will never know

 

lying beneath a sea of stars
adrift in your arms
drinking in your poetic touches
savoring the scent of you
bathed in a myriad of
delicious sensation
feverish passions unleashed

 

      you have unleashed me,   
      and consumed me...
      I look for signs that you are satisfied
    
      should I linger?

 

      I linger!

 

hands everywhere,
leaving nothing untouched
mouth follows close behind
licking, kissing and sucking

 

     licking, kissing, sucking
     where she needs it most

and finally . . .
you fill the void that was

 

together we ride the waves
until we explode
in a shower of pleasure

 

      the dream of any man
      has been achieved 
      satisfying his woman
      fulfilling you 
      as both our hearts brim over
      in every way

 

the sweat on your brow
drips onto my skin
as a tidal wave of pleasure
crashes over your face

 

everyone should know the pleasure
the joy, the fun, the laughter,
the comfort, the warmth
of this friendship we share

 

      yes,
      now that we are both satisfied,
      there is comfort and warmth,
      joy, fun, and laughter with us now
     and much more still ahead, 
     our friendship now strengthened
     by this rendevous nearly missed

     I rest my head lightly
     on your pillowed chest
     and sink into an ocean of bliss

 

a quiver, an embrace
sticky with sweat
but sweet to the taste
lips smooth as satin

 

your head rests upon my chest
as this moment I savor!








Author notes

For Anasuya's Contest: Why I chose this poem as my 'best':
I perhaps have poems that better represent my humor, poems that better represent my abstract, or my caring for others close to me here, but this is one of the very few that contains several key aspects, and one that I thought was a 'masterpiece' from the start. I have to share credit with Touchof1der, my collaborator here, for she put the piece together in it's present form (no punctuation, no caps, the font, etc. which I thought enhanced the piece as only a woman's touch can...) The background I enhanced from a base picture...

Why best? It contains aspects of some of our best qualities- humor, spontaneity, depth, irreverence, philosophy, love, passion, all addressing from within a contemporary social phenomenon- Internet romance. Where better to explore than on a site full of passionate poets, and with another passionate poet, no less?!!

So a current-events topic, an eternal theme, various human characteristics infused, a collaboration written in real-time between two poets of opposite genders... and the many challenges that must be met and overcome just to bring a piece like this into existence.

Then there was the cruel, overlooked twist that our 'eleven's' were actually three hours apart, which added to the uniqueness of this piece and generated the entire first half...

I perhaps can do more of the same (if I ever regain such strength!), but not 'better'... especially in this demanding category! So that is why I consider this to be the best of the best of all the pieces of mine (or in this case, that I have been a part of).

I chose a collaboration, and more importantly this type of collaboration, because it is a rare category.

Background:
The poem originated out of our long relationship here on AP. I sensed it was time for this next step... so I initiated the actual 'rendezvous at 11'... and without having to say anything it was understood what our purpose was... (the writing, of course!)

I like other poems I did for different reasons and in much different categories, but you made me select the best of the best, and this piece is a fine representation. It has never been entered into a contest, because as a rule we don't enter our personal pieces in contests as it seems to 'cheapen' them. I don't feel that way here with this piece, as it was done between 'professionals'. There are others I still would not enter, however, for the feelings are still too fresh, too deep, too precious, and not wholly mine to give away, those are the kinds of works that would definitely be cheapened by being entered into any contest.

Well, at any rate, I hope you enjoy this read!


wbiro


Written September 5th, 2005

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  • PassionsPromise gold member
    August 8, 2007

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    sweet heaven oh my gawdddddddddd.....i said short this one took me around and around and back again..but dearrrr this was awesome.. well done you both did really well with this.
    Much love
    Tory

  • Nicole Hanna
    May 15, 2006
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    Ah, thank you for the lovely explanation. I hadn't expected to see any collaborations, but am thrilled one crept in, because there is perhaps MORE thought put into a poem of this nature than would otherwise occur. Your author notes were well received and did their job. You've explained everything fully, which I appreciate, as it helps me understand the poem and the purpose behind it all that much more.


  • Celticmoon
    October 30, 2005
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    Well I must say this was a very finely written piece of sensual and loving erotica. Though it may have been long it was most definately effective in getting the blood pumping. I humbly bow before you both and your incredible talents.

    And just for the recond....the neck issue....I have found that it's a place for arousing among almost all women. Some more than others


    Bravo to a most delicately and classy written piece of sensual erotica at it's absolute finest!

    Blessings
    Bel


  • Blkwidow77 silver member
    September 10, 2005
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    Here! LOL The first one I wrote for him.

    allpoetry.com/Poem/1158615


  • Blkwidow77 silver member
    September 10, 2005
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    Part three? ~sigh~ ._.'''

    That was part one, and how we met...


  • wbiro gold member
    September 10, 2005
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    Well, I think you have defined what a 'part three' would be to the Life and Love poem- part two, the 'other side', and part three, the 'man/woman battles! lol "Man sans one battle only to find another"... yes, I can see it in the headlines of life...

  • Blkwidow77 silver member
    September 10, 2005
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    My goodness, that was long! How freaking long were you online? It must easily have been 5 to 6 hours!!! 0-0''

    Well, this clearly isn't what I meant about the other. This isn't about the intial contact and fall, but the 'after' you fall. Either way, I really liked the part about you being so anxious, you forgot about the time difference and was on far too early! LOL I was cracking up.

    Man... this is soooo different from my own experience. Our contact is often short and brutal... a bloody crashing, that does indeed look more of war then love! LMAO ^^-^^


  • HeavenScent4U
    September 7, 2005
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    WOW! This is wonderful. I myself an not a fan of long writes but this kept me mezmerized from the first word til' the last. Hot, passionate, tender. This is what I consider a masterpiece. Great job you two!

    Be Well and Be Blessed


  • goddesskevauna
    September 7, 2005
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    You're very welcome! As for the neck, my dear??? Oh yeah baby! I don't know about others, but...! It's a sure thing for me to get me all revved up!

  • wbiro gold member
    September 7, 2005
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    Thank you, Ms. soliloque! Beware of online affairs, the heart is blind and will long for that which is beyond your grasp! For me this particular relationship has not been painful for me, but it had been for my partner here, and I have been in painful online relationships, too, sometimes just on my end, sometimes both- the heart is ripped apart no less than in the real world, it is truly blind to the virtual being virtual!

    Warnings aside, yes, your experience here on AP, as well as your writing, would be enhanced... for what the hay, love is both joy and pain! Knowing this, you will survive!

  • wbiro gold member
    September 7, 2005
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    Thanks, Wombling, and to think chance played a part in its creation- for if I had not overlooked our timezone difference, the preamble would have never happened!

  • wbiro gold member
    September 7, 2005
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    Thanks, eaglecatch, it's encouraging to know this piece has international appeal! but then love is a language without borders!

  • wbiro gold member
    September 7, 2005
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    Well, Weltt, I have received from you the highest compliment- one who does not click actually clicked, and one who does not finish actually finished! What more could one achieve! Thanks...
    Edited on May 10, 1:04 because ''.

  • wbiro gold member
    September 7, 2005
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    Well, Ms. Goddess, I'd better watch myself around a flirting PK! lol now who said "...kisses, punctuated by whispers on my neck..." that was her! Credit given! and what is it with your necks!!! lol live and learn, I say! thanks again for the genuine critique!

  • wbiro gold member
    September 7, 2005
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    by you saying 'I could barely read all of it without blushing'!!! the word 'all'! I hope it was a good blush! lol


  • LadyOfFate
    September 7, 2005
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    umm? how did my read tell you that. oh darn just thinking about this poem makes me blush.

  • wbiro gold member
    September 7, 2005
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    thank you, Ms. Dreaming! Your reading it all tells me a lot right there- that the piece is not too long after all!

  • wbiro gold member
    September 7, 2005
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    thanks, Robin, but I would like to confess here, that just like a 'live' musical jam, it was very difficult to end! While it was going I was working pretty hard to 'wrap it up' in the length as it is, (but not too hard!) knowing it wasn't intended to be a novella! But some things, when they are going well, just keep right on going...!
    Edited on Sep 07, 5:07 because ''.


  • Fearless Leader
    September 7, 2005
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    Hmmmmm.
    I never really liked long writes. It's just like sex, y'know - can't rush it, can't take your own sweet time either. the timing has to be right. But I will confess and thank you, you just gave me a new project to toy around with.

  • wbiro gold member
    September 7, 2005
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    thank you, blonde, for your loquacious response! and an applause for catching my late-edit glitch! Nice to hear from you!

  • LadyOfFate
    September 7, 2005
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    that indeed is a long erotica, Oh my. I could barely read all of it without blushing I am so embrassed. nice poem very umm,, how do you put it, vivid, and expressive. very well writen. now I am going to blush myself to death. oh my.

  • Sweetbambina89
    September 7, 2005
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    good poem and i like the back round


  • blondeoverblue
    September 7, 2005
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    As they say it's the quality that counts and not the quantity!

    Any piece of writing or poetry for that matter should be as long as it needs to be, in order to carry the message that the author intends or wishes the reader to experience. Long doesn't necessarily equate to being dull. Lets face it, we have all read haiku that are boring!

    This piece held my attention from start to finish and at no point was I looking for the end, or just skimming over the words randomly as one does when a poem loses the readers interest.

    As a single endeavour it would have worked extremely well, and I would have been impressed, but as a collaboration, I have to say this is one of the most natural and expertly crafted pieces I have read. Your two writing styles compliment each other perfectly. I enjoyed the first part of this very much, after all, anticipation is a strong aphrodisiac as you so cleverly show with both your words and feelings. As poetry mirrors life, I was slightly concerned that when the collaborative part of this began that it would lose what had been built up in your introduction.

    But my worries were misplaced and what followed wasn’t to be the case at all. Your words swam around each other in a perfect flow, that is the give and take of any loving relationship. Perfectly matched and at no point either trying to take the upper hand, or over shadow with clever syntax and word play.

    Technically you have structured this well, the only small point that I would make is that I rest my head lightly on her soft chest should read ‘your soft chest’ as the rest of the piece is written in first person.

    Beautiful piece of writing

    Kat xxx
    Edited on Sep 07, 3:29 because ''.

  • goddesskevauna
    September 7, 2005
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    extraordinary!

    OMG! That is so intense! Yipes! Got me on fire! I got so lost in the stunningly beautiful words. I couldn't keep up with who's who. But enjoyed my read immensely! I particularly love the one particular line, "...kisses, punctuated by whispers on my neck..." All I can say to that is... GULP! GASP! UGH! WHOA! Heh! Incredible in every way. Now, excuse me while I.. uh.. go... take care of something.


  • Weltt
    September 7, 2005
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    EXCELLENT

    I usually do not click on poems that say "long" in the title but for some reason i felt compelled to give this one a gander. Even more rarely do i actually end up reading the whole thing after I have clicked but again that was not the case with this one. As I started reading it I got more and more swept up in it. I don't think I could have stopped if I wanted to. This was very beautifully written and i am so glad that I took the time to read it. Even more so I am garteful that you two took the time to write it. You have worked in unison to create something incredibly lovely and vividly entertaining. After I have completely read your piece I was confused as to whether i had just read something or if I had actually seen it happen. VERY VERY VERY WELL DONE!!!!! Thank you for sharing!

    -Dan


  • Odds and Ends
    September 7, 2005
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    wow....

    sensually poetic... i'm speechless...

  • silversoliloquysong
    September 7, 2005
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    Woohoo, definitely very hot. Never had an online affair, but maybe I should... lol. Great job, nice buildup & rhythm. It's great that you each did a part, so you get the two voices.


  • September 7, 2005
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    I loved this, the initial parts particular captivated me, the whole 'oh my god what is she going to expect of me' feelings that go with an initial meeting from an internet romance. it brought back to me all the hopes and doubts the first time I met the girl that I love. This was excellent, well done


  • September 7, 2005
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    bravo!!! Ultimate ... as long as i was reading ... felt like itz happening with me ... made me completely involve ... really gr8.

  • wbiro gold member
    September 6, 2005
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    Well, Ms. poetess, a valued critique you left me here, for we were experimenting with the title, as how a title creates expectations- she posted it as her poem with a warning that it was going to be long, I posted it as mine without one- and guess who received all the 'long' complaints? One guess!!! lol So an important lesson in titles! I've added (Long) to my title now!
    Edited on Sep 06, 2:36 p.m. because ''.


  • wbiro gold member
    September 6, 2005
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    Yes, free, a steamy second- to the real thing! But less trouble in many cases! lol such is the trade-off!


  • wbiro gold member
    September 6, 2005
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    thank you, Mel, I believe it was both of our intent to create something beautiful here!

  • wbiro gold member
    September 6, 2005
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    Well, Zonia, I believe I just may be the more innocent of the two between my mum and me here! But she is a nice lady too, I can't deny that!
    wayne


  • wbiro gold member
    September 6, 2005
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    thank you, Mr. Soul- yes, long and sweet, just like they desire it!


  • Anna Emkah
    September 6, 2005
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    SPLENDID!!!! Can't say anything else.

    One thing is bothering me..... Why are you doing this with your MOTHER? Can't you find any other nice lady? lol. Anna.

  • amateurpoetess
    September 6, 2005
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    Tonight I was looking to read, this was too long to finish, but I felt I should say something. It began okay, with beautiful verse, encounters with the internet can be strange, the first parts that I read, were like a meeting of two people in a dance.......I'm sorry I just didn't finish.


  • befree
    September 6, 2005
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    Ohh internet erotica. I have always been wariy of internet love affairs but this is hot. Beautiful and sexy, Ithought it was me for a steamy second. Well done.
    -free


  • September 6, 2005
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    This is excellent I liked it, although it was long I enjoyed it alot, nice mix of passion and lust, it read like one of those romance novels. Aswome work!


  • Airborne Ed silver member
    September 5, 2005
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    Ahhhhhh this is simply a beautiful work of art... A perfect blend of lust, passion, the act of making love, how it felt and mmmmmm so much more. You both did an outstanding job because it flows so well that it sounds like one person writting it... It really is a wonderful piece... Great work


  • wbiro gold member
    September 5, 2005
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    lol thanks, Poo, I can always count on you to get me out of a jam!


  • ShaShay
    September 5, 2005
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    Wonderfully written but I'm concerned for the two of you. If the Cyber Police get hold of this they can charge you with Cyberland Incest and that is serious. Call me if it happens and I'll see about making bail for ya'll.
    ~~~POO~~~


  • Raazi
    September 5, 2005
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    Honestly speaking wbiro, the poem does lose attention at times due to it's length....it's tooooo long. Yeah, no doubt, the poem is wonderful, but it should have been much shorter. Both of you have done an awesome job. Very little to choose between the two of you. How do two people write a poem together?


  • Phoenix Karkadann
    September 5, 2005
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    beautiful work... it was quite long though...


  • wbiro gold member
    September 5, 2005
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    Thank you, my Jewel of Arabia, for sharing your response! I'm glad it connects to a broad audience!


  • wbiro gold member
    September 5, 2005
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    thank you, angaus, for feedback from my better half!

  • wbiro gold member
    September 5, 2005
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    Glad to see you back, Porcelain! You are amazing for lasting as long as you do at teen mentoring! May you be fully rested! You know, of course, I do the same thing, unofficially, here too!

    Thanks for your critical eye which I am glad also enjoyed this! Well, I did intend it to be 'inhibited', so maybe 'releases inhibited'... nah, uninhibited! More beastly! rawwwwrrrr! lol

  • Gogetalife
    September 5, 2005
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    Awesome

    Wow, what a wonderful collaboration between two great poets in ap..this was very well done..the sensuality of this poem jumps from the page..from the way it was written to the choice of background and all..great job guys..keep it up


  • Porcelain Doll
    September 5, 2005
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    I can't believe noone has commented on this! *stands with my jaw dropped* Wow... This is just... god, im speachless! I only found on error here...

    "an unintended bump or rub that ignites
    inhibited and completely unforeseen passion? " I think it should be uninhibited.

    Right then... This is just... Mmm hot write. Caught my attention and helf fast, leaving me on the edge of my seat, awaiting your mutual climax. Aha... this isn't the sort of thing I normally come across few can do erotica so very tastefully. You two write wonderfully together. I thoroughly enjoyed this. Wonderful write!
    ~Amy

  • angaus
    September 5, 2005
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    good one

    very different it was entangled with both mystery and intrigue. Well done

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