After sex a cigarette
that is all i ask for
The only thing i want out of this
these few minutes after sex
we are calming and quite
as we both delight in the pleasures of our vices
after sex it is a cigarette and then on to
your start towards the door
i reach for my plaid boxers and my undershirt
now we have the words to say finally we have caught our breath
i don't care for this part, the words,
more is to be said for two people in a bed, in a room quite
lighting this beautiful connection
we are the same smoke waiving in perfect circles
arnt we just the perfect circle.
one moment
shared
no conflict
no words
just a cigarette and some smoke.
Author notes
Written September 5th, 2005
A contest entry
- Sweet Seduction by passionate tears.
450 points, ended September 12, 2005, 12 entries
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I liked this a lot. Just the imagery of the whole poem...
one moment
shared
no conflict
no words
just a cigarette and some smoke
I think its beautiful.. if that makes since. Nice ending and a way to tie it all up... -
this is really good, i love the line "we are the same smoke, waiving in perfect circles" awsome, thnak for entering
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"we are the same smoke waiving in perfect circles
arnt we just the perfect circle"
The words you write and how you write this is pure genuis. Its just amazing.
Kaitlyn <3 -
A cigarette after sex, or a good meal...well-written and the subject matter struck a chord....I I'm off for one now (a cigarette that is!)
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