As I think of you tonight,
I realize it's almost 5 years.
It's been 5 years of sadness,
And 5 years of tears.
Time has flown by,
Faster than I could've imagined.
Faster than I could grasp
The concept of what happened.
You were my true best friend,
The one who'd always be there.
The one who I knew loved me,
The one who'd always care.
You were such an awesome person.
I wonder why you had to go.
What would you think of me now?
I guess I'll never know.
I try to hold back these tears,
Remembering all the memories.
You took me on my first train ride.
Our dinner spot was Friendly's.
We'd spend full days together,
Often at the movies.
Then sleep overs at your house,
And breakfast at Micky-D's.
There's so much more we did,
We had such a special bond.
You'd take away all my troubles,
As if you had a magic wand.
I wish so bad to see you,
To see you just once more.
And if I could turn back time,
I'd find a way to lock Death's door.
You were my mentor and inspiration.
I call you my guiding star.
And when I look up at night,
I know, there you are.
Not one moment will I forget you.
I still wish you hadn't died.
And even though you're gone,
I know you'll never leave my side.
Author notes
about me and my grandfather...we were really close...he died of cancer when i was 11...
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Heaven's not a place that you go when you die, it's the moment in life when you actually feel alive"
option 1
Written September 4th, 2005
A contest entry
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This poem has such a sad end to it, and at the same time it has also so much beauty in some way... well done!
Thank you for entering this contest!
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I lost my "mother figure" My grandmother, from cancer when I was six, so I definitley relate to tihs. You did a very good job. I love this poem.
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WOW thats very sweet and I love the ryme thing going on. Nice job and keep it up!
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wow, this sounds like somthing my mate would have wrote, i know the feeling, i lost my pop not that long ago and it hurts, thankyou for sharing this, it is lovely
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This is a very bitter sweet poem. I'm sorry that your grandfather died when you were so young as well. It's hard to lose someone that is so close to you. Not to sound like I know what it feels like, I hate it when people say that, because they dont know what it feels like. I'm glad to see that you know your grandfather is always watching you. I liked your rhyming in this poem, it was very sweet, and fitted well with the over all theme of this poem. I did, however; think that it was a bit long, but it's sometimes hard to fit all of your love for a person into three lines, I know. I love your subject matter, and I love the way you've carried it out. I'm a fan of structure, so that's a plus for you. I also love your background...its so pretty. Well done on this one. Thank you for entering my contest. I wish you the best of luck.
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Your memories are so vivid. I, too, am sorry you lost your grandfather so young. I know at that age you view such a man as a hero. He has lived so long and he looks so wise. You think he would never die and would be that role model you need for your entire life.
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Very Well Done
A lovely poem, which moved me greatly. I was only wondering what exactly did happen to your dear friend? It sounds as if you were both young. Perhaps, it was too painful to write about, but I would still be interested to know
A nice rhyme scheme and a truly touching write. Good luck in the contest!
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I'm sure that your grandfather would be proud of the way in which you've chosen to honor his memory. This piece was beautifully heartfelt and honest, and you've done a lovely job of expressing your emotions in a natural, flowing manner. Thank you for sharing it with us.
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so many memories and great loss in our lives Ifelt your pain and love through out..take lifes punches can be painful..Linda
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This is a beautiful tribute to a missed friend. I can truly feel your pain, as I have lost a loved one myself. Good luck in the contest, and once again, great write!
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I am certain that your grandfather's magic wand still works from up in heaven... This is a very beautiful poem and tribute to an obviously much loved and missed grandpa. Your style, rhythm and rhyme is very good, and it is an enjoyable read that holds the attention from beginning to end. Good luck in the contest.
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italianGurrl, this is absolutly awsome! you did a beautiful job in expressing, the friendship you had, the loss you felt/feel, the memories you have, and how she'll never be forgotten. great job. -
Beautiful and Dedicated!
I couldn't imagine losing anyone to cancer at 11. In a span of I believe 4 years I have lost 3 people utmostly close to me. 2 to cancer! In 2002, My Zia Isabella died at 60-lung cancer, In 2003 my cousin Luigi died from a Hit and run accident (which wasn't his fault), and then in 2004 my father died at 70 from a Cancerous Brain Tumor.
Sometimes Cancer takes the very best from us and I don't think we will ever understand it. I'm still coping with my father's death, and my Aunt's. (I was very close to her). This hits so much to home with me. **HUGS** Good luck in the contest.
Marianne
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I was in tears as I read this. It so reminded me of someone .. my grandchildren. I wonder what their words would be if something happened to me.
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I know how it is to lose a grandparent. I lost both my grandmothers. This was a real good tribute. Keep up the awsome poetry!!!
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Thanks for submitting this in Surviving Loss II.
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Sweet and tender remembrance.
In reading this, it brought tears to my eyes. I also had a wonderful grandfather who would spend time with me, and he's been gone for nearly thirty years and I still wish he'd not left. There's a void when you lose someone who seemed to love so much.
I never doubted his love and in reading this I could see Papa, here, with just a word change here or there. I'm sorry for you loss and yet there is joy in having loved so much. You wrote a beautiful tribute to him, here. Amazing write.
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I see them here now, and can't explain why they weren't there just that they were missing when I checked on them.....seems that I heard something about editing with backgrounds, that might account for that, who knows. Thanks for making those notations.
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ok...its fixed...
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they WERE there...i dont know what happened....ill fix it...sorry!
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I don't see that there are any notations in your author's notes of whose works you read, maybe it didn't take, can you check on this and get back to me?
Unless I'm mistaken there aren't any author's question/comments here.......did you have two entries? if so can you copy and place here?
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I edited the comments already for what poems I read and commented on...but the whole applaud thing....where did that come from? lol did I just randomly miss it? -
ItalianGurrl,
This contest ends at 11:59 pm PST on 10-12-2005, and this is a gentle reminder to take the time to edit your poems, read, comment , applaud as per the contest rules and note the works you've read in your author's notes. Thanks for entering and make sure you've taken the time to make sure to edit for spelling, grammar and author's notes.
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Beautiful tribute! Your grandfather is honored by this tribute and he walks with you still. hugs.
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really great job here. I love it
keep up the work,
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This is an emotional sad treatise and the beautiful moments encompassed fritter away in the end and all that remains are memories sweet of course but bitter as the main protagonist is absent..Lifes like that==Shubs
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Awesome
Just taking the time see who's updated their author's notes by having read some of the contest entries, thanks for having done so.
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Thanks for submitting this poem, it really tugs at the heart. I'm so sorry for your loss, you've written of the process of losing your grandfather with such emotion along with the reality and difficulty to process and understand. I can only hope that you are reunited one day.
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I never knew any of my grandparents, having lost them all many years before I was born. I have always wondered how it would be to have someone love me as much as a grandparent could. You have truly lost someone great, and I can only imagine the loss you feel. Hugs, Patricia ♥
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I am so sorry you lost your grandpa. They are so special, treasure the time you had with him Sounds like you and him were very close. Your poem is amazing I wish you all the best
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Oh this is so very sad...my heart goes out to you. I was devastated when I lost my grandfather. Thia ia a lovely tribute to yours! Thanks for sharing it and good luck in the contest. ~Frog~
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My grandfather just passed yesterday afternoon, actually, so I really appreciated this right now. I really liked this a lot, because it had that simple kind of happiness feel. Thanks a lot for posting it <3
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Lovely poem. You get what you feel accross really well...very good write
And I simply adore the Background you used!
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Fantastic poem filled with deep emotion that I could then tell why after reading about your grandpa. I hope this wins the contest cause it's really good. I like your rhyming because it doesn't sound forced at all. One thing that I didn't like about it was that it was one big stanza. Maybe if you split it up into 4 lines per stanza, then that would break up the train of thought and help see the rhymining more. Great job and I hope you keep up this great work.
I know you'll never leave my side.
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v. good.
It is strange this closeness between grandchildren and grandparents. Perhaps it is because grandparents are older and wiser than they were as parents, remembering the mistakes they made and not wanting to repeat them. I don't know.
Perhaps the older you get the more memories of childhood come to haunt you, and you have more time of course. I really don't know why this bond exists - but it is sweet and strong.
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You had such a good relationship with your granddad, this is so very sad, and a lot of very strong memories, beautiful written. You look happy in your picture and time does heal wounds at least mekes them bearable, but other times the feelings are like a knife again, you are very brave to write such close heartfelt feelings of love.
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This gave me goosebumps,
This truly showes someone who has touched your life
and is missed, im sure he smiles down from above
wtih only love in his eyes for you..
Thank you for entering this contest
Tears
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