Sweet innocent child lying in her bed
Her cheeks moist with tears
Young life hangs on a delicate thread
She tries to escape her deepest fears
Run as fast as you can never looking back
Go and claim your protecting shield
Forget your troubles, remember what you do not lack
Remember the courage that you wield
Keep a steady pace until the darkness fades into morning glow
Then rest by the calming stream
Watch the water greet the river and flow
As if it were an endless dream
When your fantasies have ended do not fall into despair
Your hope shines like a beacon through the night
Run home to the people who love and care
And I promise you every thing's going to be alright
Author notes
Under Reconstruction. I wrote this when I was 15
Written August 11th, 2005
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liked it alot
great read.
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Wet
Sweet sweet poem. The glass is have full... just like in real life I think that the use of water has a magnifying effect. There's something real and fresh about water...
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I really like the essence of this piece. I like the hurried feeling it has of running into life. I really like this. Hope you do wellin the contest. Later. Great write. - cgirl0410
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WOW! This is like something that I could read to my little sister when she is afraid.
This is a very awesome write.
Thanks for entering and good luck.
Alexia -
Her burden is lonliness, emotional pain, and rejection.
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This is a cute piece. May I ask what this child's burden is?
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...well this was beautiful simply put. I am a little buzzed at the moment so I didn't take in everything but it gave me the chills...great job and keep up the good work.
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this poem felt as you were the one having been extended such comfort...although written as an outsider, it felt so much you were the insider in this situation. maybe my sense of this poem as relates to you is all wrong, but for some reason i don't think so. it was beautifully written...a sense of true love conveyed to yourself/another.
Jo -
I felt the comfort of a gentle hand as I read this verse. I might consider a re-write to smooth out a couple of awkward places. The verse is good and deserves all it can get. Thanks for the words.
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wow....its been written and worded beautifully....you have made the rhyming so nicely and actually conveyed a meaning without getting lost in jsut trying to make it rhyme(like i do,sometimes)....A masterpiece!!
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