Dreamer, dreamer why do you dream of so much more?
Your reveries are like the ocean waves rushing upon the shore.
You imagine life in your fantasies that seem too good to be true,
Whenever I lay down and fall asleep, I always dream of you.
Dreamer, dreamer why do you gaze up at the sky?
As if you need to spread your marvelous wings and soar so very high.
Your made up realities are all you've ever known,
But whenever you dream of life elsewhere you always feel alone.
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Written February 17th, 2005
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I would imagine that this is all of us at some moment in our existance, growing fat off the clounds and stars as we drift through the sky high above our own world.
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I would like to thank you for taking the time to view and enter my contest.
Contests here on Allpoetry are a lot of fun and I hope that everyone enjoys them.
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If you are dreaming, you should be writing
For dreams are words we should share
Sharing makes us all stronger
So thank you for sharing your dreams and words with me
Judging:
Nicely captured. Sometimes it is wonderful to dream however, as you stated "whenever you dream of elsewhere you always feel alone." Quite sad how that is.
Title: Dreamer is appropriate yet seems to be lacking something with the content.
Content: Content was simplistic yet related and carried the storyline.
Imagery: There were some nice lines that one could drift upon and ponder.
Grammar: No detectable errors that would throw of the poem.
Flow: The flow was well done. Some pause-hesitation yet did not interfere with message of poem.
A goal is a dream with a deadline.
-Napolean Hill-70
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this is an excellent poem, thanks so much for entering!
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I love this piece, very good. -
Hmmm Dreamy indeed. What's life without dreams. Well penned. Thanks for entering.A pleasure reading it.Good Luck!
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dreamer dreamer, dream away. dream a little dream and dream your life away. what awesome words to add impact to your sadness. i can relate to this one. i loved this:
"Whenever I have a dream I can only think of you."
aww. how true...but so ironic when you have never seen one's face though -
Wow, great job. Using "dreamer dreamer" as the beginning of both stanzas really gives it a powerful beginnig. loved it.
good luck in the contest!
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this is really good. it may have been better if it was a litte longer but i enjoyed it. you capture the idea of a dreamer very well. congrats. - HG
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The repetition helps this piece flow smoothly. I love the last line, "Whenever you dream of life elsewhere you always feel alone." How very true!
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Sounding like a case of 'the grass is always greener on the other side of the fence' type of thing.
Nice poem with a melodic flow. Beautiful background too.
I also think in the third line you mean too good rather than to good.
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This was a really cool poem... i really felt you emotion in this poem... i really enjoyed reading it... hope to be seeing more from you soon... kristin... poet14
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This is decent but a little confusing - and, to be frank, I wish it were a little longer. But the talent is definitely there. It's just the line "Far from you what have and what you've ever known" is a mystery to me. I just can't quite figure out what you mean there. But I always though that you were pretty talented with rhyme, and this poem is no different. Kudos! - oce
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Beautiful
I like this. I like dreaming and sometimes I hate it, with feeling so alone afterward anyway. Also great opening lines. This write is short but it leaves the reader wondering. Well keep on writing. Again beautiful write. SINcerly -Amanda* -
this was a very lovely piece Rocker
i really liked this and enjoyed reading it very much
well done... Great Job!!!
Excellent flow and a very simple a beautiful poem
Keep on writing
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This is beautiful I love dreams even though they're only fantasies they seem so realistic and it's nice to just get away from the real world. That's why I love sleeping if I could I'd sleep forever. But awesome poem I love the opening lines.
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nice
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I like the way this is short and leaves the reader pondering, keep up the great works, and thanks for sharing this, pen on!
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PERFECT :))
This is simple... but has a complicated beauty!I love it. DREAMER DREAMER.....This write goes well with the background you selected....the write makes me feel as though i am pondering existance in the soft gusts of the wind enjoying the veiw from an up high place!!!! well done this is truely beautiful!!!! -
You really captured the lifestyle of a dreamer. Great job!
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