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Bloodlust

 

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Pitch black night envelops the sleeping world;
No moon, no stars, oppressing awful cloud
Lies like an evil curse upon the land,
And the bleak cold dawn is yet far away.

 

The forest's fearful primaeval silence
Is broken by the breaking of branches,
As unknown creatures go about their dark
Nocturnal deeds of mutual slaughter.

 

Unseeing trees loom in those dreadful depths;
Savage, broken, vicious, eldritch fingers
Reaching upwards to the starless sky,
Sylvan guardians of the forest denizens.

 

Wind, cold wind, like a breath of noisome ice,
Rustles the leaves and chills my ancient heart;
My world is sad and rawly desolate,
Alone and hated by humanity.

 

But, beast from blackest Hades that I am,
I have no option but to hunt and feed;
My bloodlust will neither abate nor end
Till I have supped my fill of writhing death.

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Author notes

And, yes, that is the correct spelling of "primaeval", so no ignorant fools need comment on that point.

If you liked this, go to allpoetry.com/poem/1372287 for more nastiness.

Written on 4th September 2005 with a skinful on board.

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  • Tattboyspet
    October 11, 2007

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    thank you for your entry, but I'm afraid I don't know which picture I had listed that this pertained to as there was no link or pic attached


  • Edna Sweetlove
    December 6, 2005
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    ANOTHER GOLD MEDAL EDNA AT www.allpoetry.com/poem/1470523 .


  • miranda writes
    September 11, 2005
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    A very good write deserving of 1st place. congratulations

  • Edna Sweetlove
    September 11, 2005
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    Dear Dawnrider
    Thnk you for awarding me GOLD prize in your "dark poetry" contest. I am very surprised. You say you are a bad judge of poems. I beg to differ! Thanks again!


  • Michele La Pointe
    September 6, 2005
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    [drag]queen of the damned? either way you suck right? tehee

  • Rose of the Fallen
    September 5, 2005
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    Awesome job. Its chilling and spooky. Yet all in all well put together. Muchos greatness here! Please keep it up!

    Blessed Be,
    -Rose-chan no baka tenshi (little rose the idiot angel)

  • DawnRider
    September 5, 2005
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    Awesome piece you've written here, i liked this muchly, especially..

    'Wind, cold wind, like a breath of noisome ice,
    Rustles the leaves and chills my ancient heart;
    My world is sad and rawly desolate,
    Alone and hated by humanity.'

    Thanks for entering my contest.

  • buffytheparrotslaye
    September 5, 2005
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    Bloody Good

    And Blood is avaiable everywhere,into the night and drink your share.This blood lust hunger will never abate it is your gruesome bloody fate.When you run out of victims try breaking into the Blood Bank?Do you prefer Positive or Negative or any flavour will do.Edna imagery is dark and is well supported by the feelings of cold,desolation and darkness.Word usage awesome and this is a very strong write for the Contest.
    Edited on Sep 05, 3:36 because 'Edna hates my spelling and my blood is sweet'.


  • GiveMeTheGun
    September 4, 2005
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    friggin awesome

    very very cool. painted an awesome picture in my mind. it was so raw and just incredible. great job. take care.


  • natari
    September 4, 2005
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    good

    Very dark and I liked the imagery.Nothing like been tore up and this was very descriptive and animalistic.


  • mantis180
    September 4, 2005
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    Great poem, I love the dark broodingness (Not a word, but I dont care) I like the flow and the dark disriptions, these lines jump out in particular:
    As unknown creatures go about their dark
    Nocturnal deeds of mutual slaughter.
    Creepy... great job on this and good luck in the contest.
    -Ash

  • dream catcher
    September 4, 2005
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    Ooo. I like. Has a dark flair that is chilling at first, and then moves into an almost personal place. As though going there would be right, if only because the 'beast' that you are entices me to visit you. Incredible write
    Good luck in the contest!

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