~ DESTINY ~
Determined, we will succeed
Everlasting, the hope in our heart
Surreal, dreamlike are our feelings
Timeless, all the magic moments
Inherent, the trials and tribulations
Noteworthy, the mark we leave
~ Yearning ~
Noteworthy, leaving our mark
Inherent, tribulations and trials both
Timeless, moments of magic
Surreal, feelings that are dreamlike
Everlasting, our heart holds hope
Determined, succeeding we are.
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I do not feel our destiny is predetermined. We are the ones who make it happen with our actions in life. With positive actions our destiny will be very fulfilling.
Written September 4th, 2005
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momma, Thank you for the applause and for the words of praise you show me. We have all wasted parts of our lives at one time or another, but we learn as we grow and mature. So many times I have learned through trial and error.
Humbling that can be. 
I laugh now, but remember the tears that flowed so freely as life showed me just how cruel it could be. *sigh* One thing I have learned is you can't change the past, but you can make a brighter future from the experiences. It makes me happy to see your positive reaction to the past feelings that attempted to hold you down. More power to you. Don't stop writing, it would be our loss. 
Joyce
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This is so wonderful. So many times I have wasted my life feeling sorry for myself instead of doing something to change it. I am so glad I matured beyond that way of thinking. You are very talented and I always love reading anything by you.
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Maria, Thank you for the applause and the wonderful comment.
I am glad you enjoyed the work. Life is definitely not predetermined for us. We make it happen and it's far too short not to enjoy it. Thank you again and I'm glad you share my like in acrostics fellow starhiker. Joyce
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Yeah, totally agree. Like the people that tell your future, the things that they tell you will only happen if you make them happen, yeah thanx for this it's truly wonderful and i love acrostics that are made as nicely as this one is.
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Oh Pam, I have you to thank for it and I couldn't even come close to yours. Just couldn't find the way to make all the words in the sentences the same when I reversed it. It will happen with practice I know. I am happy that you enjoyed reading it and as always thank you for the applause you give to me. Hope you're enjoying the holiday!
Thank you so much. Joyce
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Yes!
BIG GRIN going on here. I am soooo pleased you tried one of these. You have done a fine job and your message is beautiful.
LOVED this to bits. ~Pam 
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Thank you very much for the wonderful comment, if I hadn't had one done for me I wouldn't have understood the form. I do know what a palindrome is but, to keep the same words starting each line forwards and backwards with the same wording in the line also is tough. You just figure a way to move it around and try to make it sound exactly the same.
Be happy young lady and wishing you nothing but sunny days. Joyce
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Nav my friend, I want to thank you for the applause which you always give to me.
I do like form poetry very much, as I love to rhyme. If I could get all my acrostics to rhyme and use such pristine words that I see in here I will be in heaven...LOL Now as for your CD, LOL... not the end of the world. Just download it from Limewire. I have downloaded so much music from there now, it's cool...hehe 
Now back to your brains, they are not dumb at all. You are a very intelligent young woman and have greatness in store for you. Still laughing about the nose punching...haha Thank you for your words, they are the bestest Hey, you didn't have to put the good luck in a P.S....LOL You better keep writing too. I want to see your first column one of these days. Sorry I wasn't here to get your IM, we were at my great nephew's first birthday party, whoooooooo hooooooooo. He's awesome!!!!! Look forward to chatting with you. Be well my friend and oh yeah, happy writing...hehe
Joyce
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i really love the way you set this poem out although I have to admit, it took a minute thinking about it to figure out that 'ynitsed' is destiny backwards. A lovely poem, very original, well done
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WOW!!!! You're really fond of writing form poetry,aren't you? It takes a lot of talent to do such forms and you've got that in tonnes! I totally agree with you here that destiny is NOT predetermined.It's just upto the person to determine it but there are lodsa people out there ready at the drop of a hat to blame their destiny for even the most minor things.I had this classmate who lost my beloved 'Nevermind' CD of Nirvana and he said in a philosophical tone ,"That's destiny!" I wanted to punch him hard on the nose but obviously couldn't reach it...he's 6'3",I'm 5'2"
Okay,back to your poem It took a little while for my oh-so-dumb brains to undertstand the form but when I did get it....the reaction wasOH WOWWWWWWWW!!!!!!! Do keep writing such great works
Oh yeah,good luck
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First I will thank you again for hosting this contest and go on to say that I agree with your comment very much so. I am glad that you liked it. They are hard to do. I had one done for me which is now on my home page by another poet in here.
Her words are exquisite and she has been writing a lot longer than myself. If you care to look at it you will see what I mean. Thank you again and best of luck judging. Joyce
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This is a very good point. Palindromes are hard to do, and this is an able attempt at that. Good poem.
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