You judge me by these scars I have
Do you even know why they are here?
Have you ever been raped or molested?
Can you imagine the fear?
Have you ever cried out in the night;
been told "quiet so others can sleep"?
Have you ever had to hide away
while secretly and quietly you weep?
Have you ever been so afraid that
you could not even let out a scream?
have you ever been so discouraged
that you dare not even to dream?
Have you ever had to cause pain
but dare not hurt another?
Perhaps you would understand
had you been rxped by your brother
Author notes
Yes it is true and personal
I have moved on. Not by hating but by forgiving. After all why should I let this person have control over my feelings. In my opinion forgivenss is the only way to truly get beyond the pain. You need to forgive them and forgive yourself for the guilt you have felt over something that was not your fault.
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full of pain, full of hate, yet some people understand where you come from. the flow seems a bit forced here are there,
4/5 for the poem, and 5/5 for the coloring. 5/5 for the message. And a 5/5 for the picture that the poem gives
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Your flow was a bit off, however the emotional power of this makes the reader feel your agony.
Very well done
Raker
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WOW.
that is so horrible, and i am so sorry that it happened to you.
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the poem was basically.....AMAZING!
i love how straightforward it was, not trying to hide behind what happened with complicated words.
truly breathtaking.
thank you so much for entering.
& good luck.
♥taylor.
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this poem is just super intense reading i mean it just really left me with an emotion so strong and so powerful, if that was your goal great job. the end hit me so strong like a blow to the chest the poem it self seemed like a boxer just hitting you hear and there and its so hard to read knowing its based on true events, but you forgiving him is so strong after just reading this i coudnt see myself forgiving him great great great job
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very intense
I felt that...
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this is sadly a relatable write for me and I think you captured this poetic voice quite nicely. some of the rhymes were forced and that took away from the strength of this poem however you did a good job in writing it. thank you for your entry
Em -
I commend your ability to forgive, it is never the easiest decision... At least not for me. I was molested and raped throughout my childhood, so I know these feelings all too well. Bless you for your courage.
Via Con Dios
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Excellent write. This definitely took courage.
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amazing that you can even try to put such words into rhyme. Heroic that you find the courage to share so that perhaps someone may find comfort if they have had a similar experience.
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I loved it the flow of it was grest thanks for enerting good luck
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hi mama!!!!
i was just re-reading it and it still gets to me..
anyways its super good mama i loves it,
but i am sorry..
Love,
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Such painful and raw emotions expressed here. Unfortunately I can relate to this horrific experience. You are a strong and courageous person to share this, as it can help others to know at least that they are not alone in this kind of pain. I am sorry this is in your memories. Writing can be so healing. This is powerful! Thanks for sharing it and for entering my contest.
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wow. i am so sorry you went through this.
from a literary standpoint, you conveyed emotion well. i like how you constantly asked questions, never statements, giving the reader room to think. and the last line is a stunner. definitely has a "wow factor" -
Oooh, very intense and full of raw emotions. Wow. This put me in complete awe. I'm so sorry this happened to you
I know someone else this has happened to, as well. Very amazing write, full of anger and hate and it was so...painful. Thank you so much for entering & best of luck to you ♥
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I'm truly sorry you know how this feels, I wouldn't wish this on anyone and even my ex who was a complete asshole and pretty much a paedophile, I still am saddened to know his Uncle touched him up, which probably led to the way he acts now. If you need to talk I am always here, but honestly someone like that makes me angry. I hope you know that it's not your fault and pain is no more (as long as you avoid him like the bubonic plague.
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This is so incredible!! Very powerful! Especially the last two lines.
So sorry you had to experience this pain!
Hang in there!
Keep writing, this is amazing!!
Best of luck in the contest!
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Wow..
I'm not sure what to really say about this one..
The emotions are raw.
They're real.
I can feel it.
You painted such a vivid picture.
I'm so sorry if this is a true story..
But this poem is absolutely beautiful!
Exactly what I was looking for in this contest.
Thank you so much for entering!
Good luck
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There are no words that could do this piece any justice..
The pain was just so vivid.. and the imagery!!
though dark and sad really, was so heartfelt..
I can relate in the way of rape, but the brother was never around so I had no worries there.. I am so sorry that you had to go through this..
You expressed your emotions so very well.. thank you for sharing this with us..
Angel
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Awww I'm so sorry... I know that doesn't help, but what else is there to say. I don't have a brother and would always be afraid of having one, as I'm frightened of men. No, I haven't gone through that but when I was at home in my own house my boyfriend tried to rape me and all I thought was that I didn't want him to hurt my parents, so I agreed to do something else, so I know a pain on a different level. Always here to talk if you need someone though.
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this is powerful. period.
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i love this one of my faves so far! thnx for entering
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The flow of the rhyme in this poem is good. It's sad to be victim to rape especially by a family member. It is hard for others to understand unless they have been through it also. Thanks for your entry.
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oh wow. first off i am soooo sorry this happened to you. but on a happier note, this was an awesome poem! thankyou so much for entering my contest and best of luck!
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wow this is really deep thanx hey a personal question did this really happen? i know kind of wut thats like
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Really intense and I LOVED it!!! Most people who have never cut don't even want to understand why others do it. Most people think it is for attention, which I will give it to them, some do. You really spoke out for the people who have good reason for cutting and for those who feel like they have no other choice to feel better. AMAZING JOB and keep writing.
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Wow...utterly fantastic poem. The repetitive questions were striking. This was a worthy poem, and an amazing write. Great job. Good luck and keep it up!
Best of wishes,
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Wow. This was amazing.
It flowed well and you even
incorporated a great rhyme.
Have you ever cried out in the night;
been told "quiet so others can sleep"?
Have you ever had to hide away
while secretly and quietly you weep?
Have you ever been so afraid that
you could not even let out a scream?
I definitely liked this section the best,
it's so sad someone would hush up someone
trying to feel what they feel. It's
not healthy I think. I hope this doesn't
happen anymore. Great take on the subject
of rape. I wish you the best of luck
in this contest. (and congrats on the silver.)
-Emily (editor)
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Fantastic!
Wow that is very good. It flows and rhymes very well. It is full of emotion.
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This is so tragic and emotionally written, You have conveyed these feelings to us through your choice of words, and we feel the anger and emotions you have pent in side. This is a good way to release some of those feelings. Keep penning.
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You said reading it might help me understand. Thank you. I hope you have worked this through - can't imagine how hard is must be. It has helped.
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Rape in general is such a horrendous thing to deal with, but to have the crime commited by a family member (be it brother of father) is unconscionable. These are people who are supposed to love us and protect us, not destroy us. This poem seems to personal to talk about the technical aspects of the piece, so I shall just wish you well in dealing with the memories...
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This poem had excellent flow and screamed with emotion-Great Write-Roan
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WOW very well done strong message great rhyne and meter you did well on this one I hope you are not writing this from persanal experience though I like this work
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Great job on this. It was powerful and very emotional. I liked it. It also flowed well. I think that it could use a little more punctuation, but that's just my opinion. Great job!
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