Grandma's Grave
I kneel down
say hello
place the flowers
tears begin to flow
Every year I do this
And every year I cry
all those years together
I never thought about goodbye
But now you have gone away
and I know not what to do
So I come once a year
to say I still love you
Author notes
About a woman I loved very much. My grandmother was truly GRAND to me. I will always treasure the time we had together.
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A contest entry
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3000 points, ended August 26, 2008, 1668 entries
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Aww..this was sweet and sentimental in its' expression. I loved it. I don't know what I would do, when that time comes. I would probably do the same. Visit her and tell her, how much I loved her. But I tell her that even now, as much as I can, while she is still around.
My "Oma" did help my mom in raising me, so I have much to thank her for.
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Loved it
Explained your loss very well
the rhymes didn't pollute the poem as they shouldn't
The title fit well
I found no typos
The poem explained itself
Loved it very much
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Sorry for your loss, sorry for your poem. It is sentimental, not good.
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Thanks for entering
What a brilliant poem! I really love it! Its so sad and heart felt.. It makes me want to cry. Thanks for entering. Good luck! -
Very sweet write and I can tell you have a lot of love for your grandma... Which is refreshing. But I just didn't get wowed by the choice of words, the line limit was a bit awkward.
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very sweet, but sad as well.
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Great i liked this its very well written short and shweet. thanks for entering my contest i wish you the best of luck.
..<3..
Shelly -
This is so beautiful & stunning with the imagery and words. It's a very nice thought to say the least!
Thanks for your entry!
Kari
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Such an excellent remembrance of affection. Thank you for sharing
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Very heartfelt and lovely... a wonderful rememberance to someone loved... Well deserving of gold recognition. Best of luck here...
Ken
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Thanks! And great poem!!
Great Poem!! *shakes your hand*
Thanks for entering cuz it got you a gold trophy.. lol.. loved the poem!
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aww this was so sweet it litterally brought tears. It shows how much you truely loved her and still love he
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Thank you for entering my short poems contest. This contest states that it is for poems of ten lines or less. This poem is over ten lines.
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Im truly sorry for your loss.. but what you do here, many ppl dont do...keep it up giving love to those you love as so.. great weite and good luck!
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this was truely beautiful. my grandma was my world, and she passed away a few years ago. but she was creamated, so i can't go to her grave. don't let a year pass that yuo don't go visit her, she may not be alive in body, but she's always there in spirit. keep up the great work.
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http://allpoetry.com/contest/show/2404559
Thats the link for the next round of the contest. Congrats again -
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This was beautiful my friend..this is something I do as well. So heartfelt and touching especially this time of year. Bless you and good luck in the contest.
Hugs,
Cheryl -
You never do think of goodbye, as we like to think we have all the time in the world to be with someone, but we don't. I am sure though that your Grandma would know that you would visit her and would always love her, like she would you... I know it's only a little comfort, but it's something.
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This is quite sad, you said so much in so few words. The emotions are amazing. Congrats you have made it past the audition round
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50/50 for following rules
15/25 for overall poetic ability
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great
The way that you made this poem to re-affirm your love for your grandma is probably the best part. My favorite line would have to be: I never thought about goodbye. I liked how you referred to it as goodbye and not saying goodbye.
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Very beautifully written. Saying goodbye is something I'm not very good at and do not make a practice of it. My Mother was the world to me and I like you go to her grave just to say I love you, for I've never told her goodbye and I never will. Thanks for sharing this beautiful piece and goodluck in the contest.
crafty
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Well written.
Also heartbreaking and sad.
Still very well written.
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This is beautiful. I have a poem like this about my grandpa, he was my best friend. You should read it. Brilliant write. Thank you for your entry and good luck.
Jenn
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this is truly sad...
very nice tribute
my Gpa has been gone for bout 12 yrs now and i cry
every time i think of him
thank you for entering!!
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aww this is beautiful...short ,sweet,an beautiful,,my condolences on your loss.hugs honeydew
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thank you so much
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i love it. makes me think about my grandma. great poem
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It's good to know you've had someone in your life that has touched you so deeply. Not everyone is so lucky. You did a nice job on the rhyme in this poem. I also thought you were able to communicate your pain within your words, so kudos for that! Glad I got the chance to read this...
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Now you have me crying too .Beautiful write .If you allow your self the time to tell every one at any moment how much you love them you will never feel like you have to say good bye . Lovely poem
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Wow very hearetfelt piece of work here very good write I enjoyed it thanks for posting it
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You know my grand mother was my world when she died i didn't know what to do. My mother came and told me at school and i fell down in front of every one in tears. The emotion is this peice even made me cry. Although your better than me i can't bring my self to go to her grave.
Great write and read.
luv bunches,
~Mary~
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