Embrace my thoughts
allow me to reveal the true me
help me out
I'm unconscious of my very own actions
pop this pain right out of me
suck out all of my troubles and throw them
squeeze my hand, make me feel safe
be kind to my heart,
it only loves you
wipe these dreaded tears from my eyes
and stop the leakage within me
hold me tight,
as reality strikes harshly once more
dance with me beneath the stars,
as midnight arrives
open you mind to me,
share your thoughts
tell me once more,
that you love me
kiss my lips, and hug me tightly,
make me feel loved
as I drift off to sleep
lay me down softly,
upon the bed, next to you
give me a reason to live
give me motivation to get up in the morning
look into my eyes that attracted you,
and sing to me
smell the scent of my perfume
caress my wavy hair
and get a taste of me
put me in no kind of pressure,
and respect my decisions
cry with me, when I need you to
scream with me when I want you to,
accept what I can offer you,
a big portion of my heart
Author notes
I wrote this in like a week, I didn't really have enough time to just sit there and write all of it in a day...so I did a little each day I hope you liked it
Written September 3rd, 2005
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BRAVO
Great write awesome Job... Love it well thought out -
B.E.A.U.T.I.F.U.L.!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I love it...
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Oh this is beautifully expressed m'dear
The imagery is overpowering and full of emotion. Thanks for the read
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This is really good I loved it I havent found many that I really like in this contest I think urs might be the first. Thanks for entering. and good luck
Always,
Brat
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Thank you sooooo much I think your comment is one of nicest most awesome comments ever! I realy appreciate you kind words, I love when ppl tell me me work is awesome, well then again who doesn't? lol You ARE AWESOME! Thank you soooooo much
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Oh God! What an amazing poem! You are a very talented writer. You've taken what I feel inside for someone I truely care about, and expressed it exactly as I would. I hate writing love poems, they sound so sappy to me, but when I read yours..it's just so amazing. To get me to admit I like a love poem is a hard thing to do, but you more than deserve just a comment for this. Wonderful piece of work!!!!!!!!!
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so romantic .. nice flow..
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nice, very nice. Love has a very deep meaning and you did a very good job in explaining it good work.
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Great poem!
This is pretty good considering you worked on a piece of it each day in a week. It helps you get more thoughts the next day so you can write more down. Excellent work! -
this was awesome, I love your style and the way you put alot of thought into it, the way you just let the flow out, very awesome, I hope we can be friends, and I hope im not bugging you
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this is truly a nice poem keep penning!!
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Hey yea..didn't you receive one of those messages which tells you that I changed my name? well anyways it's still me..im still Karen..lol thanks for your comment and applaud and of course we can keep in touch
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The best ive read in months!
I love it!!! this is like the best I have ever read for a couple months now!!! I saw that u changed ur name but thats ok hope we still keep in touch. ttul bye.
Always,
Brat
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great write. i enjoyed how you express your self .. so freely .. as if not a care in the world except to win over his heart and to not get yours broken.. great write again thank you for writing this ! .. kristen
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this is really good,i liked it and the emotion was so wonderful,yeah there seems like alot of time put into it,and it turned out great,good job on this,and great write ~Laura
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I Am A Lover
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wow i really love this poem.. it says everything i want to tell the one person i love but cant seem too. please read my poem I Am A Kover. tell me what you thimnk you may chose the other
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hey thanks soo much I really appreciate it
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hey good write. I like this its cool.
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wow i really LOVE this..u can tell u took time to wrtie this...which u did lol i can realte to it...i feel like that and i have someone like that..
awsome awsome job
-Diya
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