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be my desire


Walk away from me again,
I'll wait for you till the end,
Time and time I've been a fool,
Never let me go.

Wrap me up, un-fold me
Always be there to hold me,
Be my strength,be my love,
Always be my desire.






Author notes

I used the line: wrap me up, un-fold me.

I commented on:
if you fall
give me breathe
Written September 3rd, 2005

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  • JennyNYC
    September 4, 2005
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    I like what you did with the line from the song.. I enjoyed this stanza the most "Walk away from me again,
    I'll wait for you till the end,
    Time and time I've been a fool,
    Never let me go." I felt that this poem could explain a little bit more. I thought it could benefit by being longer. I was just getting into it and then it ended. I kinda felt cheated out of knowing the full details of this mysterious love. Nevertheless, nice write and good luck in the contest.