why did you leave me?
you left me alone that day...
i still cant forget when i got the call...
that the ambulace took you away...
how could you do that to yourself...
i thought you were ok...
how could you do this to me...
i'll never forgive you for today...
those deep scars...
you did them yourself...
with a shaving razor...
high on a shelf...
you knew it would happen...
you knew you betray...
you knew that it wouldnt...
just take your pain away...
i still dont know why...
you had to try...
and take your own life...
why did you have to make me worry...
why did you make me cry...
was it really that bad...
was you life that full of strife...
Author notes
i have a friend who has attempted suicide 3-4 times...
this is for her...
Written September 2nd, 2005
A contest entry
- lover's suicide by Trueloveneverdies.
300 points, ended November 30, 2005, 23 entries
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beautiful sorrow
very sad write. im sorry, i kno how u feel. actually i just recentlly wrote a peom about suicide also if u would like to read. the only thing i would critique is that in your last stanza you kind of loose your rhyme,, but it is still an awesome peom, well written! -
Wonderful...
Oh wow this is so sad. I think I'm gonna go cry now. You did a really nice job of telling us how you felt; it seemed as though I was reading a piece of your soul. -
excellent expression of love
That was beautiful writing. You expressed your pain and hurt in a way where I felt them. There is a word for that, I believe it is empathy or something like that. Anyway, I am wiping my tears away from the emotions that you brought out in me. EXCELLENT EXPRESSION!! Beautiful transference of emotions to words. I loved it!! I hope everything is okay in that situation. I am sorry that happened. Someone once told me that if you ever smile again, ever, then it was worth not dieing for. This makes sense to a person who is so very sad and then the next time they smile they will remember that statement. Does that make any sense?
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great write!
suicide is always a permanent solution to a temporary problem...and those who try and sometimes succeed can't think about those they leave behind. very poignant write. really captured the pain of the friends and family left behind because of suicide.
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