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Time Will Tell - Sonnet #XVI

Sonnet XVI 

 

He said, "and I adore thee through my skin",

where tattoos tend to bleed, the closest gets

to being such as like one's next of kin

who resurrected much from life, forgets.

How scrawled upon has inwardly provoked,

the splendid aphrodisiac, 'coquette',

to whom it is our feature both are cloaked

beneath the need for much more hiding yet.

If words were an account of those we piece,

together, such as, "I adore thee still;

An answer is not needed though it will

remind us, through more worthy ways, increase...

A time when having made devotions feel

that there's no finer phrase we could conceal.

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Written January 11th, 2003

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  • Andre ben-YEHU
    October 2

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    Wonderful...

    Art and knowledge, wisdom and musicality abound through the magical lines of this outstanding and majestic composition. "Time Will Tell - Sonnet #XVI" shines.

    In respect and admiration,

    Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU


  • Cream22
    June 24, 2005
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    breathtaking

    heavenly if I do say so myself


  • February 6, 2003
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    Awesome! I love this poem! Wow...


  • Blondita
    February 5, 2003
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    Some beautiful words in there...loved it , great piece


  • CookieZeal Greeters member
    January 30, 2003
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    don't touch it!

    I give separate verdict for content, language, voice, and originality.


  • CookieZeal Greeters member
    January 30, 2003
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    excellent

    oh m'gosh! I haven't seen good pentameter for a long time.

    Thrilled that I came and read. I hope it's what I think it means. In form, content, language and voice, it's absolutely beautiful
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    misspells-- carressed, adrenaline,
    typo - (of) reasons
    one's (needed that little apostrophe)


  • budlem
    January 28, 2003
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    excellent

    Well worded and nicely touched upon!!!


  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    January 13, 2003
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    excellent

    this is beautiful, very nicely down. blessed be :O)

  • iTsOnLyMe123
    January 11, 2003
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    excellent

    great write!!!! keep it up
    -ali


  • nell
    January 11, 2003
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    don't touch it!

    beautiful, beautiful! this is a fantastic poem, flowed just so well. i enjoyed thank you for sharing this :)

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