Stop.
Look.
Listen.
Take a minute: try to understand the words that flow from my tongue
Do you even a have a single clue; as to what you have done
Drop.
Release.
Let Go.
Let the gun drop from your shaking hand
Your life is not worth taking: Not over a man
Calm.
Breathe.
Inhale.
The coolness of the air will help to free your mind
This is not you: You are rational, warm, and kind
Fly.
Spin.
Twist.
Grab a hold of your world that is tumbling out of control
Think of the eternity - the outcome - the resting place for your soul
Black.
Blank.
Unblinking.
Your once beautiful eyes appear lost - unreachable - searching
The pinkness of your lips was of yesterday now cracking - thirsting
Voices.
Screams.
Tears.
They are all part of the pain of having your heart ripped out and thrown at you
The result of your lover - your partner betraying and being untrue
Reflection.
Me.
Stranger.
My God, this unsteady creature is myself - It's me
Those are my eyes - my screams - my pleas
Understanding.
Realize.
Regroup.
Looking again: I have to be sure for what my eyes see cannot be true
I have allowed myself to be a part of something the devil has brewed
Truth.
Life.
Love.
Throwing the gun aside, I make a deal with the stranger in the reflection
I will overcome this hurt - this rejection
Stop.
Look.
Listen.
Author notes
The mirror can be too true.. if that is possible... 
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~Eternal Suicide~
Written August 31st, 2005
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Thanks so much for your comment. This is a different write as oppose to what I would usually write.. but when you get a glimpse of self like this.... it is quite moving! thank you so much for commenting on this!!
Melanie
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Wow - Lady is right on target with this one -- though when is she not, right??
winl This was hauntingly beautiful and so uplifting - just shows what gut wrentching heartache love can bring yet how unbelievably strong us women are to get up, brush ourselves off - and become even stronger!!!! More power to ya sister!!!
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Paula,
Thank you very much for your amazing comment.. it is truly appreciated. The mirror unfortunately cannot hide the truth. And seeing a stranger in the reflection can be a frightning thing to deal with. thanks so much for the wonderful contest... and I hope that you have fun judging!!
Always,
Melanie
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Wow! I'm in awe, my friend, of this truly haunting write! And if this is personal, then let me tell you how very glad I am you made the choice to live, and fight to reclaim the person you once were! This was just astounding, in every way! The form you presented it in was fabulous. It set the piece off, and made the reader stop at each of those points where there were just the one-word lines. Forcing us, along with you, to stop, and think about what this person was about to do! And you gave us a wonderful surprise in this! That the person you had been begging with to stop, and think about what she was doing was youself....that was remarkable! You're an extremely talented poet, my friend! I appreciate, more than I can tell you, the message of this piece! In fact, the many messages this piece conveyed! But maybe the most important one is that no one is worth giving our lives up to; either to live for them, much less, to die for them. BRAVO! Major standing ovation here!
Paula
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Thanks skittles. It has been a while since I have heard from you... hope all is well your way.
Thanks again.
Melanie
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Thanks Michael. I truly appreciate all the sweet comments that you leave on my poems!!
Loves and hugs,
Mel... Your Goddess
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Once again you did an awsome job. I really liked how deep and personal it got. You did a really good job of turning it in to a way different perspective. keep up the good work
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oh sweet melaine this is quite the write with wisdom and truth in it. To truly look deep within is alays a challenge and you did it so very well great job!!
love,
Your Prince
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thank you Nicolette. And yes inner-peace is hard to come by when you seemigly live your life for someone else. Many women, like myself at one time in my life forget that God is the answer to that peace. And until you can be happy and self fulfilled, then it is impossible to bring happiness into the life of another. Thanks again for you encouraging comment!
Mel
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Tears,
Thanks for your comment... often people fear the answer the mirror will give them... and all for different reasons of course... I appreciate you words...
Mel
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A soul-searching write of deep reflection and intro-spection...wonderfully painted here in words and complimented by the picture, Melanie. These kind of poems are the hardest to write, because one is actually writing it for yourself...and there is no fooling the self... I liked the pauses in this poem...the rational verses the emotional and how at the end the beautiful, wise, rational woman won herself back. Reading this again made me realise the importance and value of inner-peace....no matter what the circumstances. Many, many woman can and will associate with this poem. Very well-written....and so much to ponder on!
~ Nicolette
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I found a lot of wisdom within this dark write
of a dark time.. We hurt indeed we do, and as you put
the key words are : Looking again: I have to be sure for what my eyes see cannot be true
I have allowed myself to be a part of something the devil has brewed
More then not we allow the devil to drive in the drivers seat
a clear write of all of this until we stop. think and listen
best of luck to you in this contest.
There is a lot of truth penned within this write that im
sure lots will understand.
Blessings
Tears
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