Would it be all right my darling
if I promised to be still
just to lie down here beside you
on this green and grassy hill
And remember days of laughter
that I thought would never end
would it be all right my darling
if I lay here and pretend?
Once again I hear you whisper
those sweet nothings in my ear
In my mind, I see you smiling
for a moment you are here
And you kiss me oh so softly
saying no more tears need cried
For you'll be there waiting on me
when I reach the other side...
Would it be all right my darling
if I lay here and pretend
And remember days of laughter
that I thought would never end
Just to lie down here beside you
on this green and grassy hill
Would it be all right my darling
if I promised to be still?
Author notes
"Mylee"
A contest entry
- On Your Favorites or You on Mine by piccola.
600 points, ended October 11, 2008, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I'm alone......are you? by movedon.
700 points, ended November 25, 2008, 103 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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wow
Absolutely stunning. I'm almost out of words to say how well this is penned. Thanks for enteirng. and wonderful work.
Mylee -
let me repeat myself
this expresses great sadness but also great love. The ultimate I guess. Rhyme superb as always. What you need my friend is a happy, laughing muse to lead you to a better place. Although I must say, this write is ... 
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this is wonderful. thank you so much for entering. I hasve only seen one other poem as mysterious and guessing as this. I really liked this very much.
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Love love love it.....you write as i do...life really about love....be it lost, forsaken, or true.
Thanks for sharing....
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Gentle poetry
Dearest Poet
When one of a couple go Home, the one who stays behind stands in the place of the both -- carrying on the memories and happiness and love that can never die. Being complete and whole does not have to have a physical presence. Within the soul love lives eternally. But it is human to mourn the loss, and your poem expressed it in such a touching way.
A soft and gentle sadness within these words. It brought tears to my eyes.
Myra -
The thought of there being someone who has so much love and devotion towards another is beautiful even though at the same time it is also very sad to see someone stuck on what was instead of moving ahead to what could be. This is quite beautiful and your imagery is sharp and vibrant. Good job!
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~~~Touchof1der~~~
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I feel fortunate that my life partner is still with me and that we still do this sort of thing when arthritis allows. It is a sad but wonderful thought that such moments have ongoing reality through poetry such as yours. Thanks you for keeping it going.
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This made me feel like i was having a beautiful picinic outside. I see the trees sway, the birds chorusly sing and I know everything's going to be alright. I think that says it all nicely about this delightful poem. Love is always young.
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That was such a beautiful poem and my god did it make my hair stand up on end. So sad when we lose someone close to us and nothing can pay tribute quite like these types of writings devoted to them, great great job.
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