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A carefree day

HAVING OUR JOBS DEALING WITH THOSE LONG WORK DAYS
WE NEED TO RELAX,WE WANT TO ACT SILLY AND PLAY
FROGGY & I DECIDE TO GET UP FOR FUN AND JUST GO
A DAY FOR OURSELVES WERE GOING TO HAVE FUN WE KNOW
WE START OFF WITH OUR PICNIC BASKET IN HAND TO THE CAR
ENJOYING THE BEACH THAT'S WHERE WERE HEADED, ITS NOT FAR
ARRIVING AT THE BEACH,BAREFOOT WE RUN THRU THE SAND IT'S HOT
LAUGHING,FROGGY IS TICKLING ME,YOU GOING TO SAY UNCLE,I'M NOT
NIETHER GIVING UP,WE STOP FOR A KISS,THERES WHERE WE EMBRACE
TOUCH OF HIS HAND THE FEEL OF HIS LIPS,WE'RE AT A SLOW PACE
AS WE LAY, EMOTIONS & DESIRES BECOME STRONGER,WE'RE MAKING LOVE
LAYING IN EACH OTHERS ARM WE CUDDLE,WATCHING SEAGULLS,IS THAT A DOVE
NOT READY TO LEAVE,TAKING A SWIM,TEASING AGAIN,IT'S SO MUCH FUN
TUGGING AT HIS TRUNKS,OH IT'S A CAREFREE DAY,WORRIES,WE HAVE NONE


Author notes

LOVING TIME ON THE BEACH WITH UR LOVED ONE
Written August 31st, 2005

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  • konrack
    October 25, 2005
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    Nice one missed reading your poetry, ghlad to see your still at it. hope your well all the best. kon


  • Starshine on me
    August 31, 2005
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    lovely

    aww this is great. fun and frolick on the sandy beach.
    nice write lovely.
    Starshine


  • Eyecberg
    August 31, 2005
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    Nice job!

    Lucky you! I enjoyed this Angel. Reminds me of times ... never mind. You paint a very easy to see picture, sometimes that is nice. Not haveing to puzzlle out what the author might have meant.


  • Immortal Flesh
    August 31, 2005
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    a very playful and romantic getaway.
    My luck...if i ever try to make love on the beach......more then a few seagulls would poop on me.
    I had fun reading this, good write angel
    Edited on Aug 31, 1:23 p.m. because ''.