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It's Just Me Lamenting in Here. Go Away.

 





I Gave Her Pain

I can't go near
I gave her pain
not understood
and yet it came

She's over it now
she has moved on
must stay away
I gave her pain.



She Knew, She Knew

She knew, she knew
but I was blind
and such a fool
under her spell

She released her spell
she held on me
I lost her love
but now I see.



The Door

She will not read
what I write here
through all the pain
I left her there

She can look
this way no more
I take her hand
and close the door.



The Pen

I stick this pen
into my ear
what does it hear?
I'll write it here.
thump thump thump.





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Written August 30th, 2005

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  • wbiro gold member
    February 22, 2006
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    Yes, a pettiful love poem just may about sum it up!


  • Ishtar
    February 22, 2006
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    [[pulls out a bunch of tissue and sobs]]

    WHAT SAD, SORRY, PETTIFUL LOVE POEM!

    Lol. No, I'm just messing! This was so cute and sad. Now, why does that pen hear thumping? What's going on in that head of yours?

    Nicely done, dear Uncle.
    -Reni


  • SexyAngel0418
    August 31, 2005
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    WOW... This is really sad Gramps!!! You did a great job on it though!!! I love this poem!!!

    Hugs,
    Beth


  • Starhiker
    August 31, 2005
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    Nice and sad poem, with a funny twist at the end. So this is 'lament'. Interesting concept! Loved the intricate rhyme and pattern in the three first sub-poems... Excellent work, wbiro!

  • wbiro gold member
    August 31, 2005
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    Thanks, Mum, but these are collected oldies, your son is fine, feeling more like the last part in this collection... sure, pain is a part of us all, and it lingers as a lesson! I'm looking forward to 'judging' my mum contest...!
    Edited on Aug 31, 5:47 because ''.


  • Touchof1der silver member
    August 31, 2005
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    Okay Sweetie... listen up! There is time for everything. A time to laugh, a time to cry, a time to love and a time to mourn. Your time for mourning has just ended mister! It's time to pick yourself up, dust yourself off and be happy and rejoice for what you have instead of what you have not. Life moves on and if you don't get up and move on with it... you will get trampled on and stepped over. Blow your nose, wipe your eyes and grab my hand... I'm moving along and I'm taking you with me dammit!
    (`'•.¸(`'•.¸ ¤ ¸.•'´)¸.•'´)
    ~~~Touchof1der~~~
    (, .•'(¸.•'´ ¤ `'•.¸)`'•.¸)
    Edited on Aug 31, 1:35 because ''.

  • wbiro gold member
    August 30, 2005
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    well, vini, I'm glad you responded to this, I wasn't sure how 'she' would take it... well, you wore me out again. Good nite!

  • nolonger
    August 30, 2005
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    Ohhh wbiro, this is such a sad dark write, filled with emotion, I also felt angst longing and heart ache.I felt alot with this, mixed emotions, insecurity, I know I read to far into things, Im sure she is hurt for maybe hurting you and wants to take it back, or so im guessing, wonderful write, and not to morbid
    always
    ~ vini ~

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